Hey guys, could you critique some of my online game? The focus is on conversation and rapport building, not meeting up for lays. The idea is that I might be able to use some of this in real life. In short, I'm looking to synchronise the VERBAL with the NON-VERBAL if you get me. I'll give 5 examples but I've got hundreds more. Thanks.


#GIRL 1 (HB 8.5): this is the most recent convo, it's average game for me. She's dark haired, bright white face and blue eyes. she says she works at RAF and she is also into skyrim - anyone who reads her profile is invited to 'date' her skyrim person, in fact

ME: can your RAF skyrim person drop down and do 20 push-ups?
HER: Hahhaa not for shit
ME: can he/she jump through hoops and stab heavy bags with bayonets though?
HER: Haha certainly not. I'm not in the RAF btw, just work on the base haha
ME: what do you do there? x

D'oh - think I just fell into the small talk trap. - BINGO

#GIRL 2 (HB 7): she's 32, no information in her profile whatsoever, just a picture of her with a camera in some city (looks like an American city in nice weather. New York perhaps). In spite of such little information about herself to go on, it says she doesn't reply frequently to messages.

ME: it's nice to see some girls take cameras to these beautiful exotic cities, I mean how else would you be able to keep a memento?
HER: Thank you, you seems interesting but I'm much older than you.
ME: you're right too old for me

Best and most typical PUA response to this question just have to see if she replies

She isn't interested but polite enough to tell you like it is, your response response could be ' i eat girls like you for breakfast ' but even then I think you're swimming uphill -

#GIRL 3 (HB 7, maybe a 7.5): brunette, looks slightly goofy, she has lots of info in her profile but nothing especially exciting or playful.

ME (hoping she gets the satire): oh! I go to the gym and drink coffee too. But I'm too stupid to read books and I'm a loner so no friends. Message back if interested. (Emoticon aces come in handy here, I think she replied out of sympathy
HER (apparently not): Ahh I see you drink strong black coffee. I drink really milky Coffee! I bet you're not that stupid, have you read Harry Potter?
ME: milky coffee? oh well that is it. and harry potter? isn't that about some dorky guy with glasses?
HER: Yeah! Basically mainly milk and splash of coffee - you should try it! Ha ha noo, it's so much more!
ME: so you just like milk then?
oh yeah there's a ginger dude as well.
HER: Yeah basically milk with a kick
Actually it says you've read Harry Potter on your profile. I see its all lies now! Anything else you're lying about? :p
ME: yeah the gym, I mean who can be bothered with that?
HER: Ha ha I can. It's fun
HER: I bet your profile picture must be a lie too
ME: That's right, no way any body could be so drop dead gorgeous in real life (good)
HER: Ha ha
HER: All lies! This is a great start!
ME: Shams, like most things in life require a solid foundation
HER: Is your name even BLANK
ME: that's sort of a demi-lie since it spells out my initials
HER: Ahh okay, I'll let off!
HER: Good day?
oh dear, small talk trap lurking
ME: Yeah a good day woke up pretty late can't say I've done much but fuck it, it's saturday. You?
HER: Sounds pretty relaxed. Yeah I've had a fun day, it's my sisters 18th today so we've been preparing for her party.
HER: When I say prepare, I've just had a two hour nap. Was very nice
ME: 18th is the best one, for my 18th I had a pot of tea and watched east enders with my mum.
ME: well you need to sleep before you can partay

You need investment to qualify,' you seem cool but let me ask you, what would your best friends say about your personality? :p' - enough with the small talk boring shite

#GIRL 4 (HB : cute brunette, enough to go on in her profile.

ME: ...sorry did you say something about vodka on a friday night
HER: None tonight!
Not feeling too well.
ME: aah well in that case vodka goes well with cough syrup you know
HER: I don't have a cough though.
ME: they go well together anyway
THEY PROBABLY DON'T
HER: If you say so..
ME (hoping she gets the Cataracs reference): you should ask three 6

Get some attraction stuff in there, teasing, cock and funny etc, it's like you're trying to be a normal generic AFC


GIRL 5 (HB 7.5): Cute girl with hair arranged over lip like hair, so I make a Mario reference. I think I get too sexual in this convo and that is my downfall.

ME: what up mario?
HER: Luigi? Did you shave your stache?
ME (about to make an ERB reference that I hope she will understand): Actually I'm the Wright Brother: Wilbur, not Orville.
Your princess is in MY castle now so why don't you just dudda dudda dudda back down your pipe.
HER (she get's it ): You and your brother can get back in your biplane and make out with each other.

(This is going well

ME: we're gonna beat you so fast it's like we're holding the b button (Challenging - good)
HER: You'll get pummeled, you'll wish you never stumbled out your little wind tunnel
HER: I'll take the shrooms, you can have the princess... Truce?
ME: I think we should have a bit of both
HER: I'm down. I'll bring the triply felt wall hangings and lava lamp, you get the princess's consent
ME: it's a date
HER (making a rhyme): I'll pick you up at 8
ME (rhyming back): ok bring along a mate
HER: Have protection? I don't want to procreate.
ME (about to put the nail in the coffin): As long as it's sensodyne I can't say I'm one to slate

...and she doesn't reply, no surprise there.

Get away from the roleplay and start to get real with each other. You need investment,so you need to qualify

Anyways, yeah critique away and don't beat around the bush because I'm looking to improve my convo game in real life

Hey guys, could you critique some of my online game? The focus is on conversation and rapport building, not meeting up for lays. The idea is that I might be able to use some of this in real life. In short, I'm looking to synchronise the VERBAL with the NON-VERBAL if you get me. I'll give 5 examples but I've got hundreds more. Thanks.


#GIRL 1 (HB 8.5): this is the most recent convo, it's average game for me. She's dark haired, bright white face and blue eyes. she says she works at RAF and she is also into skyrim - anyone who reads her profile is invited to 'date' her skyrim person, in fact

ME: can your RAF skyrim person drop down and do 20 push-ups?
HER: Hahhaa not for shit
ME: can he/she jump through hoops and stab heavy bags with bayonets though?
HER: Haha certainly not. I'm not in the RAF btw, just work on the base haha
ME: what do you do there? x

D'oh - think I just fell into the small talk trap. - BINGO

#GIRL 2 (HB 7): she's 32, no information in her profile whatsoever, just a picture of her with a camera in some city (looks like an American city in nice weather. New York perhaps). In spite of such little information about herself to go on, it says she doesn't reply frequently to messages.

ME: it's nice to see some girls take cameras to these beautiful exotic cities, I mean how else would you be able to keep a memento?
HER: Thank you, you seems interesting but I'm much older than you.
ME: you're right too old for me

Best and most typical PUA response to this question just have to see if she replies

She isn't interested but polite enough to tell you like it is, your response response could be ' i eat girls like you for breakfast ' but even then I think you're swimming uphill, concentrate in good leads -

#GIRL 3 (HB 7, maybe a 7.5): brunette, looks slightly goofy, she has lots of info in her profile but nothing especially exciting or playful.

ME (hoping she gets the satire): oh! I go to the gym and drink coffee too. But I'm too stupid to read books and I'm a loner so no friends. Message back if interested. (Emoticon faces come in handy here, I think she replied out of sympathy
HER (apparently not): Ahh I see you drink strong black coffee. I drink really milky Coffee! I bet you're not that stupid, have you read Harry Potter?
ME: milky coffee? oh well that is it. and harry potter? isn't that about some dorky guy with glasses?
HER: Yeah! Basically mainly milk and splash of coffee - you should try it! Ha ha noo, it's so much more!
ME: so you just like milk then?
oh yeah there's a ginger dude as well.
HER: Yeah basically milk with a kick
Actually it says you've read Harry Potter on your profile. I see its all lies now! Anything else you're lying about? :p
ME: yeah the gym, I mean who can be bothered with that?
HER: Ha ha I can. It's fun
HER: I bet your profile picture must be a lie too
ME: That's right, no way any body could be so drop dead gorgeous in real life (good)
HER: Ha ha
HER: All lies! This is a great start!
ME: Shams, like most things in life require a solid foundation
HER: Is your name even BLANK
ME: that's sort of a demi-lie since it spells out my initials
HER: Ahh okay, I'll let off!
HER: Good day?
oh dear, small talk trap lurking
ME: Yeah a good day woke up pretty late can't say I've done much but fuck it, it's saturday. You?
HER: Sounds pretty relaxed. Yeah I've had a fun day, it's my sisters 18th today so we've been preparing for her party.
HER: When I say prepare, I've just had a two hour nap. Was very nice
ME: 18th is the best one, for my 18th I had a pot of tea and watched east enders with my mum.
ME: well you need to sleep before you can partay

You need investment, so qualify,' you seem cool but let me ask you, what would your best friends say about your personality? :p' - enough with the small talk boring shite

#GIRL 4 (HB : cute brunette, enough to go on in her profile.

ME: ...sorry did you say something about vodka on a friday night
HER: None tonight!
Not feeling too well.
ME: aah well in that case vodka goes well with cough syrup you know
HER: I don't have a cough though.
ME: they go well together anyway
THEY PROBABLY DON'T
HER: If you say so..
ME (hoping she gets the Cataracs reference): you should ask three 6

Get some attraction stuff in there, teasing, cocky and funny etc, it's like you're trying to be a normal generic AFC - you need to stand out


GIRL 5 (HB 7.5): Cute girl with hair arranged over lip like hair, so I make a Mario reference. I think I get too sexual in this convo and that is my downfall.

ME: what up mario?
HER: Luigi? Did you shave your stache?
ME (about to make an ERB reference that I hope she will understand): Actually I'm the Wright Brother: Wilbur, not Orville.
Your princess is in MY castle now so why don't you just dudda dudda dudda back down your pipe.
HER (she get's it ): You and your brother can get back in your biplane and make out with each other.

(This is going well

ME: we're gonna beat you so fast it's like we're holding the b button (Challenging - good)
HER: You'll get pummeled, you'll wish you never stumbled out your little wind tunnel
HER: I'll take the shrooms, you can have the princess... Truce?
ME: I think we should have a bit of both
HER: I'm down. I'll bring the triply felt wall hangings and lava lamp, you get the princess's consent
ME: it's a date
HER (making a rhyme): I'll pick you up at 8
ME (rhyming back): ok bring along a mate
HER: Have protection? I don't want to procreate.
ME (about to put the nail in the coffin): As long as it's sensodyne I can't say I'm one to slate

...and she doesn't reply, no surprise there.

Get away from the roleplay and start to get real with each other. You need investment,so you need to qualify[/b]

Anyways, yeah critique away and don't beat around the bush because I'm looking to improve my convo game in real life

Ok thanks pebbles.

so girl 3 never replied after that so it seems as if your observations were right. but girl 1 has replied, so I've just used your suggested line, see if it get's me anywhere:

just to recap with the new stuff added on:

ME: can your RAF skyrim person drop down and do 20 push-ups?
GIRL: Hahhaa not for shit
ME: can he/she jump through hoops and stab heavy bags with bayonets though?
GIRL: Haha certainly not. I'm not in the RAF btw, just work on the base haha
ME: what do you do there? x
GIRL: Work in the shop and bar x
ME: Awesome. Listen you sound cool but let me ask you...what would your best friends say about your personality?

ME: Awesome. Listen you sound cool but let me ask you...what would your best friends say about your personality?
GIRL: I dunno I'll have to ask my best friend hahaha
ME: you should it's the best thing because what other people perceive you isn't always the way you think you are perceived XP
GIRL: I asked her. She said shit. Hahahahhaa
ME: you need to tell your friend to stop being so pessimistic hahaha

Well, if you wanna practise verbal game. I would recommend to practise verbally.

Online is cheating since you can think up the perfect response.

I guess what you're doing is better than nothing but I hope you at least go out and not sit behind your computer practising verbal game rejecting girls because you're afraid to meet them face to face

you're welcome by the way