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I kinda find that opener to be a little... too descriptive and unbelievable, actually.
Like screaming: LOOK - UNDERPRIVILEGED CHILDREN!
Shorten it, and make yourself the friend - good advice from the other poster.
Something like:
So listen, I'm taking part in this Christmas giving program and I've got to buy for a little girl. She's 9. I'm clueless with this shit - what are some decent gift ideas?
yeah, I hear ya. Shorten it down, of course, and it will allow you to make your point a lot quicker and not overload them with information. My intention was to make reference in the original post re making it about yourself rather than a friend but it completely slipped my mind when writing it.
Not sure about the unbelievability part? I guess if you mean it's more unbelievable making it about "a friend" rather than yourself I can see the reason behind this, but I imagine this sort of event happens all the time, not just at Christmas, so it shouldn't be too unbelievable, right?
Appreciate the comments guys - some other good openers already suggested, love them! Keep 'em coming.