I know you're using Bravo line. But there is a big difference.
"You checked me out and didn't message me. So what? Not hot enough for you? Fine. I can take it. You [zodiac sign] are nothing but trouble
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Note, he didn't sound needy or frustrated like your reply. But rather playful and he qualifies them at the end. Don't copy and paste other PUA lines if you don't fully understand what they're doing. Be original.
One other thing is avoid using LOL, LMAO unless it's something REALLY hilarious or funny. Otherwise, you're just laughing at your own jokes. It makes you seem insecure and don't even take yourself seriously.
For example:
- LOL you're right. That was hilarious -
OK
- I want you up against the wall lol -
RED FLAG! If you're gonna say something, own it. Don't add lol to diffuse the tension