I'll be hones, telling a story has never been my strong point, so I've been trying to focus on how to improve it. Here is something that happened to me last night that I think could be used, any tips on how to clean it up or improve it would be appreciated.


Yesterday night I was out at a local bar where I always go. Thins tiny place around the corner from my house, it feels like family there I love it. After a couple drinks there me and my friend went out to the car and were talking for a little. She noticed this older couple, 40s, stumbling out. Next thing we know there's a huge BOOM... I get out of my car immediately to make sure they're ok. The guy backed up.... into the building! I go over to talk to them and tell the guy he shouldn't be driving, make sure they weren't bleeding or hurt. He gets all pissed off telling me he has underwear older than me and I shouldn't be telling him what to do. I had to question why he had underwear for 24 years but whatever. His wife comes around to talk or whatever and she immediately started flirting with me. I don't know why but older women love me. She was all "Hunny leave this nice young man alone... he is too adorable to yell at look at his blah blah blah drunk talk" The guy got even more pissed from this and I could tell he wanted to hit me. Now you don't know me but I always have an energetic but laid back personality. Life is always good and nothing phases me type of attitude. I knew I had to do something drastic here though or I'd have to hit a 40 year old man and that wasn't on my to-do list for yesterday. I got in his face and started yelling. It must have been my tone or assertiveness or something but I saw that grown man turn into a little kid instantly. He ran inside getting his friend I guess for backup or something but his friend was pretty sober. Luckily I talked some sense into the friend and his friend drove them home.

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KCCO

I think the main problem is, that's a dull story. There's no real excitement there. Obviously you have the DHV from the dude's wife but it doesn't really go anywhere. I don't know if this story is true or not, but that doesn't really matter. Just sex it up a bit. Or change it completely. Maybe instead of a car he was operating a parachute while under the influence and landed in a tree (exaggerating for effect here).