hey guy, i need help with my myspace page
i have been trying 100's of openers and i have been get only a 5% sucess rate
and it thinks its because of my page

please tell me what i should change
be as brutal as you can, lol
thank you very much

www.myspace.com/dpx102[/url]

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Dmitriy

no one has any advise for me ;(

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Dmitriy

i tried clicking on the the link but it says page cannot be displayed

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Dmitriy

here's what I noticed...

Your front page doesn't convey much about your personality. The background picture is unoriginal and boring, the things you have to say about yourself are humorless.

Myspace pages need to be eye catching and funny. If people aren't entertained, they won't keep looking.

I looked at some of your pictures, and I really liked what you are trying to do.

1) show you do fun things
2) show that you have lots of fun friends
3) show that your preselected by females.

This is exactly what myspace pictures should do. However, I'd like to be a little more specific here. Many of your pictures look like you snuck into the frame of someone elses picture, then try'd to play it off as yours... here's some examples:

http://viewmorepics.myspace.com/index.c ... ID=4978478
girl looks annoyed your there
giant DLV
looks annoyed your there
Looks like you just snuck into the picture - dlv
snuck into the frame
pictures of groping chics are creepy
creepy guy with guns... not good
you look like your having a lot more fun then she is... there are a couple of more of these as well

that suit you wear is way to "stiff". You look like a used car salesman. I'd ditch all those pictures of you in it. From now on, when your sarging in it, untuck the shirt, loosen the tie, unbutton the top 2 buttons... you'll look way more relaxed.

hope this was helpful. let me know if you have any more questions.

hey xfiend
thanks for the advise
i made a new page tell me what you think

old page - http://www.myspace.com/dpx102

new page - http://www.myspace.com/dp9103

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Dmitriy

its private...

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"He who risks the most, wins the most"

sorry its not private anymore

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Dmitriy

the new layout is sharp. I still don't think its very funny though, I'd like to see more of that.

don't tell me your cocky... BE COCKY
don't tell me your fun... BE FUN
don't tell me your sarcastic... BE SARCASTIC

you get the picture.

also i don't understand the line about "i changed my mind about everything, i want to be friends first". It doesn't make sense.

Your pictures are much much much better. They make you look way more fun. I think though, that you may have to many girl+boy+girl pics. seems like there's 4 or 5 of them on there... I'd go with one or two, max. Otherwise you come across as try hard.

Lots of improvements though!

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"He who risks the most, wins the most"

i got the about me and from a few pua's myspace pages
do you have any suggestion on what i should change my about me too

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Dmitriy

the new layout is sharp. I still don't think its very funny though, I'd like to see more of that.

don't tell me your cocky... BE COCKY
don't tell me your fun... BE FUN
don't tell me your sarcastic... BE SARCASTIC

you get the picture.

also i don't understand the line about "i changed my mind about everything, i want to be friends first". It doesn't make sense.

Your pictures are much much better. They make you look way more fun. I think though, that you may have to many girl+boy+girl pics. seems like there's 4 or 5 of them on there... I'd go with one or two, max. Otherwise you come across as try hard.

Lots of improvements though!

ooh, just for reference, here's mine: http://www.myspace.com/cincitydevil Keep in mind that I have a girlfriend, and i'm not trying to sarge anyone with my myspace page... but I do get a lot of messages along the lines of "you seem like a lot of fun" "its too bad you have a girlfriend" "i love johnny cash" "I really like your page" etc etc etc.

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