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First off, I want to compliment you on doing this kind of stuff and playing the game. It requires confidence and willpower. Good job man.
To be honest I dislike your game. For me it looks like you are too much willing to go out with them, you are showing to much IOI's and it looks more like a job interview (try using statements in place of questions). I like the thought of them trying to impress you; for example I use lines like these to achieve these:
Good looks are regular nowadays, why would I go on a date with you? (although this may sound very direct and challinging for a girl which you just know for 2 minutes, it does show you are different and you can always bend it into your favor)
Most girls will try to proof themselves and hereby you switch positions, she will try to impress you by asking that question.
The questions you are asking such as, what do you do and why etc... These are questions a lot of her friends also ask her so these do not trigger emotions, they just build up trust. Trust for what, being the 'nice guy' and she letting you wait for the p*ss, because she wouldn't want to lose you right away.
(She knows she might never see you again if she gives you everything at once.)
Do not get offended by my comment, I am just giving advice here to improve your game and to even more increase your succes with using less effort.
Nonetheless good job and continue playing.

I'm very open to criticism but I have to disagree with most of what you're saying. Believe it or not I'm familiar with the line:-
"Good looks are regular nowadays, why would I go on a date with you?"
This is Mystery Method 101, while some people have success with MM in clubs I've heard of very few people even using it during the day. The biggest difference between day game and night game is the need for authenticity.
When you meet a girl in a club she isn't her regular self, she is the "partying" version of herself. There is nothing wrong with this, most people go to clubs to let their hair down and act differently for a few hours.
When you meet a girl in the day she is 100% herself, she'll therefore respond better to you if you are 100% yourself and authentic. Running lines from "The Game" or using any gamey tricks on her is counterproductive.
Your point about having a more emotional conversation is valid but it isn't always needed in the initial stage of a pickup. My aim is to just get her to agree to go for a coffee with me. Day Game is a little like shock and awe. You open directly, banter a bit then escalate quickly (by suggesting an instant date). Once you're actually on the date you can worry about getting her emotions going.
But also watch the first video again and watch the girls body language when I talk to her about modeling and suggest it's easy. She start's talking about the pressure she experiences to stay slim and look her best as a model. You can see from her body language that this is quite an emotive topic for her and she's quite self conscious about it. It's not just talking about "what do you do and why".
At the end of the day both girls agreed to go for a coffee with me very quickly. With those particular girls i really didn't need to do anything more than I did.