Ok guys, let the critiques fly. This is what I've had up on Match and POF for months. Obviously it's getting me nowhere, so please, any help would be great. I've changed it around about a dozen times. I'm ready to ditch the nice guy persona and let the inner PUA loose!

Hi,
As with your other post i do not want to give it all away (If you want example profiles and messages then PM me and i will give give you a special price on my eBook) BUT I’ll also give you some free help here because I’m a nice guy!

Your current profile is getting you nowhere because it your life story, and every other chump is offering their life story, it’s not actually that bad compared with allot of guys in my area at least.

I also think it’s a little try hard and if being a nice guy is just a "persona" then you want to be the real authentic you.

The PUA worlds may force you to adapt BUT do not lose the real you, just improve upon the real you to create a new better you.

What opening messages have you been using with this profile? Also have a Look at other guys in your area and you should be able to immediately see the once who get results from the once who do not.

Adam

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Hey man,
These lines make you sound way to serious about finding the "one". Through my experiences online, I learned that many women think that kind of stuff is corny and they might think you are a catholic boy. Take it out and put something along the lines of "looking to connect with that lucky girl who can keep up with me" "friends first, see where it goes" - Something to show you aren't trying to find true love.

I do agree with the above poster about being yourself but you are on this forum for a reason, and if past ways havent worked, then you have to change it up while keeping true to yourself.
Lines like this kinda make you sound like you are trying to impress people. Add these things too your interests section and you can put working out, boxing, mma or whatever you are doing at that gym.

Remove the nice guy statement, show it in person. Girl's see this and naturally assume you are such a nice guy that you will watch their dogs while she goes on a date with a non-nice guy. You understand?


Last but not least, while reading your profile, I did not smile, smirk or laugh once. I am sure a women will not either. Revamp it, add humour, make yourself seem less of a nice guy and create some mystery in the profile. Post your picture aswell and the forum can take a look. I had some mild success on these sites and I afterwards picked the brains of the girls to see what was like and what was not. Come up with creative headlines and messages. Do not sounds like the 25 other guys that have tried to contact her today. SPAM SPAM SPAM. Creating unique messages for every girl is great, but will waste hours and might not even get you a response back.

Anyways, that my opinion, good luck.

Cheers,

PS-There is a whole online section in this forum, learn from it, people will help you for free, do not purchase ebooks.

Hi guys. Thanks for the feedback.
Well, I wouldn't say that it was a front. I really was your text-book nice guy--the one that got beat out every time by the PUAs. So, I've decided to mend my ways, put some of the nice-guy parts on the shelf, and unleash the inner PUA wanting to get out.
Good point. I'll keep that in mind.
I haven't really. I mean, when I find a girl I think is attractive or compatible, I try to never comment on their photos, as I think it comes off as superficial. Rather, I would comment on something they wrote in their profile. I don't do the "hey what's up" or "hi."
Heh. That's the thing. I was trying to find "the one" or someone to settle down with. But I've given up on that, for now. Right now, I'd just like to date. If I find "the one" in the process, cool. If not, I won't feel defeated.
Noted. Awesome, thanks.
Which is pretty much what would happen. I do get it, yup. Let them find that stuff out later.

Here's my profile, including the photos, on POF: (it's identical on Match): http://www.pof.com/viewprofile.aspx?profile_id=21932524

Just updated my profile:

http://www.pof.com/viewprofile.aspx?profile_id=21932524

The name's JT. If you haven't met me, you should!

I live in East Bay and just moved here about a month ago. Please don't google my name or you'll find out why I had to move away...

I like being around people and out doing things, though am not opposed to staying in for a movie or a little knife/burning chainsaw juggling.

What I'm looking for in a girl: A pair of eyes, nice smile, someone who has a sense of humor and likes to have fun, and having all four limbs is a bonus. Beauty is common. There are lots of beautiful girls in the world. I want someone who has much more to offer than her looks.


First Date: Let's start things off as friends, real casual like. Keep it simple. If it escalates into something more, great.

Hey man,

I really think your pictures are great and show tons of personality. The new profile looks way better too. It makes you sound like a really fun person and your pics add to it very nicely.

http://www.pof.com/viewprofile.aspx?profile_id=21592603

I haven't used my account in awhile, but it did get a good response rate in the past. Pictures are crap and I never got around to updating them. Maybe as an example it can help you.

Cheers and good luck,

If anyone has any suggestions for mine, that would be great. OP got me interested in using online gaming again.

EDIT: I'm not trying to hijack your thread, was thinking we can get some succesful profile links on here to use as examples.

No worries Smooth. Thanks for the input!

Cheers

I know this was a dig at me and i do not really care, the fact is the method i give my customers, is my unique method, it is not like anything you will find here.

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