1. Spell and grammar check everything. A lot of girls pay attention to that.
2. Get a new pic, I think somewhere on the site its says that the camera into the mirror is the most disliked pic. Good body language though.
3. Liked the line about out dressing every guy in the room.

In general, shorter is better, the less words you take to say something, the more powerful it becomes. Also, less info means more mystery.

What do you think of mine?
http://www.okcupid.com/profile/darkstar1731

I think yours is really good. I think that I could use yours as a model for this kind of stuff. You have good body language and good pictures. Also your profile exudes alpha male. I am updating it currently and I agree with just about everything you said. So thanks for the help.

"I have dated around, and I don't apologies." I think you meant to say apologize. Apologies is a plural noun and it's singular version would be apology. You need an action (verb) therefor you would use apologize.

Your profile comes across as a little feminine, when I read it I get the gay shopping buddy vibe. You talk a little too much about clothes, and in your pictures you're wearing basically all black. I understand that it might just be your style, but consider adding a little more color. If you are going to do the dark clothes look go to google images and look up some pictures from GQ, this is how it should be pulled off.



You can pull off that sophisticated look with just a little work, you're kind of a mix between Dr. Dre and Tay Zonday. I'd say ditch the glasses, if they are transitions just get normal glasses or contacts. If they are sunglasses, what are you doing wearing them indoors?

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If you can make a girl laugh you can make her do anything.

Spelling / grammar is a MUST. When posting online profiles any errors make a girl think "OMG REALLY?? All you had to do was paste it into word and run spell check.. fucktard!"

yes they think like that.

Otherwise, you have some style, but you aren't really showing it. Change your profile pick from the stereo typical lame mirror shot to either an action shot or your other pic where it looks like you are on a runway. And for god sake smile. Even if it's a little smirky or a touch innocent looking. If you don't look like you are part of a badass band or gang the frowny face just makes you look angsty. Girls either want someone who is fun, or someone who is going to make them cower in awe. In between just looks lame.

Loose the typical stuff, like wanting a girl who can hold a conversation and all that. It just makes you seem pretentious. Put something fun like "a girl who can tie a cherry stem into a knot with her tongue... now that's skillz". Add some pizzaz to the boring stuff. Like being a physics major. Girls see that and they think "he MUST either be boring or too intellectual for me". Down play that with a dash of humor. "studying to be the Master of the Universe" let it seem arrogant but also a little funny. It will make for good convo later.

Lose the pokemon reference, it makes you seem like a video game nerd. Just say you love a good old school video game once in a while. It gets the point across without the reality check of nerddom.

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"Would it be wrong to join sexaholics anonymous to pick-up chicks?" "...yes, and stop eating that baby."

-Psych3r-

Just updated if anyone wants to look and give an opinion.

Obim, is that your name? I like it very much, especially "destroying the boundaries of humanity" and "I used to be fat", your profile almost sounds poetic, and there is not an ounce of neediness or a single dlv, which separates you from 99% of other guys on the site. I'm trying out the David DeAngelo Online Dating Program, he seems to agree with my short and concise theory, I've changed my profile quite a bit in the name of experimenting, take a look and let me know what you think.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QUvLZeDgU-c

This guy is only joking in all of his vids, but in this one he actually DOES give good advice for what to look like in your profile picture, also it will give you a few good laughs, ENJOY

Hope this helps,

Peace,

Troyden

EDIT: I'm NOT trying to sell anything, It's not bad advice

Peace,

Troyden

Generally much better.

You might want to tone down the cockiness just a tiny bit though. cocky works when its peppered in funny. just cocky will push girls away. I think your right on the line. Maybe just work in a few humor tweeks without taking away from the strong, short and to the pointness.

one example:

"Being a leader, socializing, improving myself and those around me."

to

"Leadership, being social and working on myself - so those around me can better bask in my glory!"

first just sounds like you want everyone to be like you. second seems like your either clearly kidding, or bat shit crazy and suddenly interesting.

just an example, add your own flava.

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"Would it be wrong to join sexaholics anonymous to pick-up chicks?" "...yes, and stop eating that baby."

-Psych3r-

I like Darkstar profile, mimic that, and upload a better picture.

Darkstar : in my opinion the only flaw is in book section "The Art of Seduction", drop that.

It actually has nothing to do with came, its about persuasion, but your right, good point.

New Profile Pic what you think!

Anyone?