Not too harshly! haha

http://www.plentyoffish.com/viewprofile ... d=28794855

http://www.okcupid.com/profile/huahuahuahuahua

I've gotten a few responses.... but my response rate is very low, I'm like 5/30. I've tried canned stuff, my own stuff.

I kind of copied a mPUA's okcupid profile.

Oh yeah and I'm 16 and a half

Any ways to increase my response rate?

Hey, man. Just a couple of quick thoughts:

1. You shouldn't have a picture of yourself with another girl in there. It's not making them jealous. It's an immediate turn off.

2. Your 'What I'm Doing in Life' is good - the first line. The second shows potential, but no actual movement. Should be more like "I'm on my way to being a sports agent" or "I'm working on becoming a sports agent". It shows more forward movement in your social status.

3. Your Self Summary I'm afraid comes across more as self-bragging than comedic. I know it was supposed to be cocky-funny, but it comes across more as just self-centered and egotistical.

4. Try to clean up some of the rambling "jokes" like the Zimbabwe midget and such. I personally don't find them funny, though it's obvious you do. No problem. I'm not criticizing you. But that sort of off-the-wall humor gives away that you're 16. I may not have known it if you hadn't told us, but I would have thought of you as one VERY immature 22 year old.