Hey guys, just wondering if anyone can offer any help on my PoF profile?

here is a http://www.plentyoffish.com/viewprofile ... d=21547003 to the actual profile

Here is the profile description:

If you're bored with the guys here, on PoF, then I'm afraid I probably won't be of much use to you; because I don't have a secret identity; I'm not involved in international espionage; and I don't wear my underpants outside my pants and fly around with a red cape - unfortunately, I'm just pretty normal.

If I were to describe myself though, I would say that I'm tall, dark and handsome, great fun to be around, an excellent listener, an even better kisser, and hilariously funny; I'm considerate, compassionate, caring, honest and hard working, I'm charitable, I'm strong, I'm in touch with my emotions but in a very manly way, I'm energetic, I'm thoughtful, I'm a good dancer (again, in a very manly way), an amazing lover, and I'm also incredibly modest.

I do have a bit of an allergy to kryptonite though - doctors haven't diagnosed the origins yet.
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If possible, I don't want to go too over the top "pompous"; my personality is a lot more laid back, so if it would be possible to not have to change tack too much, that would be sweet.

All help is greatly appreciated though.

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I think it has too much self promotion. Just write: I'm a good guy, that actually likes women. So what kind of a woman are you?

At least that's what I would try.

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cheers guys.

it does sound a bit much alright. I think I'll use that line afc_gone after the opening gambit - thanks

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Let me know how it goes!

Is this any improvement guys?

If you're bored with the guys on here, I'm afraid I probably won't be of much use to you; becauseI don't have a secret identity; I'm not involved in international espionage; and I don't wear my underpants outside my pants & fly around with a red cape - unfortunately, I'm just pretty normal.

I suppose, if I was to describe myself though, I would say that I'm tall, dark and handsome; great fun to be around; a great listener; in touch with my emotions (in a very manly way), a passionate kisser; compassionate; and phenomenal in bed (really, you should see me sleeping!).

I guess, I'm just a normal guy who likes normal women; so, are you normal?

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Check out the profiles of other guys. I think you'll find a lot in common with their profiles, so you kind of loose yourself in pile of guys.

This is a nice advice by Cajun http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=y88OSDXP ... re=related

You should never dlv yourself that is a horrible way of trying to attract women. You should be dhving in your profile as much as possible, but not showing that you are try hard and making the stuff up. You should always say,not word from word, that I am an interesting guy, and you want to get to know me because I am not like everyone else. Why would girls want more of the same?

Imagine your profile as a dhv story and then you will be able to work it better.

again, thanks!

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