Can someone give me some pointers on my profile, I really want to figure out if it is the problem or my opening messages. http://www.plentyoffish.com/viewprofile ... d=23196477 Thanks a lot

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-profile pic is a cartoon version of yourself, change it to a normal pic of yourself lol. best profile pic to use is one showing you have power, you're with your friends, or even with mom etc. (read somewhere pic with mom shows lot of alpha value?)
-your interests shouldnt all be things that start with the letter "B"
-change your "about me" a little bit. once i read "If you have a small dog in your purse we probably won't hit it off." i LOL'd. ha. your about me should basically be a DHV story about yourself. ex: "whats up? my names Dev. Not much to say but Im 6'0 and always find myself at the gym after somethin somethin."
-take out "I'm super outdoorsy", or just dont use phrase it like that lol. immediately.
-For the "Must haves" I would take all that off and put something like "must be a good cook, charming and wonderful; the female version of me"

few things i could think of just off the top of my head. if you dont agree with some stuff i listed, i gotcha dude. its just how i saw things

I'm not too savvy at describing myself but here goes anyway

It's generally best not to be negative.

And agreed change the main pic from the cartoon one. People are reading your profile wanting to see what you're like in real life, the cartoon just throws up another layer.

My idea behind the cartoon picture was to get them to see it and be like WTF then view the profile. Maybe I could put one up that is a normal picture yet still captivates them? Perhaps a normal picture with a nutty cartoon land back ground lol. Thanks a lot for the info

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No cartoons at all would be my advice!

You need to change this up a lot.

1. Get rid of the cartoon profile pic. Just delete it completely.

2. Get rid of "I'm not too savvy at describing myself" ... you're negging yourself and everyone writes that. You're a confident PUA, you should know EXACTLY who you are and be able to explain it without a problem.

3. Get rid of "I'm super outdoorsy", and replace it with "I love the outdoors"

4. Get rid of "Welcome to my write up". Just go straight into it with "Hey, my name is Dev and...."

use the pic of you in the sweater vest with the trees in the backround, its pretty good. much better than the cartoon one for sure.

also get rid of the background sunflowers it's too try hard. Throw in some disqualifiers that's a MUST... read "the online game" it's pretty short, but it has the basics to get you started.
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Also your first date section qualifies yourself way too much. Don't be so try hard. Tell about a time you took one of your ex's or dates on a great date in a casual way.

"First date is really all about what mood i'm in or what I feel like doing, I remember a recent great time I had was when I went to.... go into a short ass but descriptive story (try to provoke emotions, and at the same time don't mention NOr avoid the girl of the date too much either)"

I agree about getting rid of your cartoon image and if several guys are saying it, take the advice.

To ward off fatties, be more clearer about the type of female you want to meet, along the lines of : 'as I value those who like myself, appreciate the importance of good health and fitness, by exercising regularly, I would prefer to only be contacted by like minded females who think similarly'. If saying that or anything similar, it's assumed you do work out, are fit and go to the gym.

For myself, size 14 is the maximum body weight of female I'd take. Size 16 qualifies as too fat.

Irrespective whether the main photo has terrible lighting, or you did that intentionally with Photoshop, get rid of it - it doesn't show you standing up clearly, or show your face clearly.

yeah that photoshopped pic is another no no. The women like to see you, edited or dimly lit pics are just going to make them dubious. The clearer the better for the profile pic, one that stands out in the row of users is possible, so vibrant and light. And how about cracking a smile in one of the pic you put up?

Plus why the secret job, 'my career'?! Be honest.