Hey guys, decided to try online dating recently figuring it'd be an easy way to add more chicks into my life..so far tho, I'm thinking I'm not doing it right. Any help would be greatly appreciated...first off, here's my overall bio:

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"O hai! name's chris, what's yours?

At the moment I'm between semesters, mad bored, looking to make my life more interesting for when I'm not working.

Currently in life I'm going to school; not really sure what I wanna do afterward, though moving somewhere sick is def in the plans. I'm into music; listening (all kinds) and making. Play piano, keyboards, synthesizers, anything like that.

People describe me in a lotta different ways...I've been called scene, rocker, dork, and all sortsa stuff. I'm not a big fan of defining myself, but I'm a pretty adventurous dude, fun, crazy and chill, conflicted, and always busy with something, whether it be tarot cards or crankin tunes.

New experiences are badass, and so are new people, so hit me up with a message! I might add to this later...or maybe you should just talk to me and find out what I'm like.

btw I need a new profile pic where I actually show my eyes...I'll get right on that...yeah. "
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How's that sounding? Also, what's the best type of pics to showcase?


Thanks for feedback guys, it's appreciated.

OK good try but the text in my opinion is rubish. In simple terms: you have nothing intresting in your life, you dont know what you want to do with your life... this is not appealing to women. (note: no i am not saying my life is perfect becuase it is not but i dont go around telling women all about the disinteresting things!!!)

Picture wise, just a picture of you doing something interesting.

I think you should go with the opposite of what you've been doing. You say you don't like to define yourself, but being able to define yourself means you know what you want and you have something you're doing. That's an incredible quality, and I know that I think far less of people who don't have any sort of foundation like that.

Second of all, I would avoid saying something like "O hai". It is friendly and goofy, but it reeks of internet slang which I think most hq girls will dislike. Of course, you could be after some gamer chick so to each his own.

In the end if you like the impression you gave me, then take my changes with a grain of salt!

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Thanks for the feed back guys! Honestly, I didn't even realize what kinda vibe/attitude that was giving off, and it makes sense now that I see it. If you've got a minute, I reworked the profile to try and define myself more (I kept a lot of the same structure, so hopefully it's a big enough improvement). Lemme know what you think - feel free to critique any of it:

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Hey what up? My name's Chris, what's yours?

I'm all about music, the gym, art, and new experiences.

At the moment I'm between semesters, mad bored, looking to make my life more interesting for when I'm not busy. I'll be a jr this fall, learning stuff and all that.

My style is kindofa mix between scene, rocker, grunge...it's pretty much its own alternative mix. Music makes a pretty big influence on my life, ever since I started learning the piano when I was 8. Now I'm into anything with keyz, synthesizers, electronic stuff, etc. Honestly, my goal is to make music for a living; I know a lot of people say that, but trust me on it.

If I had to define myself, I'd say I'm a pretty adventurous dude, fun, crazy but chill, and always busy with something, whether it be tarot cards or crankin tunes. I like learning about a lot of things, so I'm always reading new books.

New experiences are badass, and so are new people, so hit me up with a message! I might add to this later...or maybe you should just talk to me and find out what I'm like.

btw I need a new profile pic where I actually show my eyes...I'll get right on that...yeah.

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Thanks all

I think this is a lot better now, just avoid saying that you're mad bored... especially when you say later on that you fun and adventurous. It's a little incongruent.

Cool that you play keys by the way, I'm a guitarist and about 20% of the time I'm listening to music I'm jealous of keys.

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awesome, thanks for the help man. and thanks haha, honestly I've always wanted to get into guitars. Tried it once, couldn't figure it out =P