I reworked the info on my profile, and tho i like it...

im curious about the opinions of people who dont know me. Whats it say about me, what feelings do you get when you read it.

and of course i love to here suggestions from other experienced memebers.

http://www.myspace.com/fugheddaboudit

and just as a reminder...asshats move on...

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"The greatest mistake you can make in life is to be continually fearing you will make one."

I am going to start with the about me section first. Straight up I found your "About Me" section was like reading dry poetry. There seem to be no real wow factor in your "About me" section. Now this could be just your personality but that how it came across to me over all. You also somewhat qualify your self within your first paragraph as well. It also continues throughout your profile. Besides that I thought it was a bit long. But some people here are for longer "About Me" section others like me go for shorter ones.

Besides that the overall looks of the profile are pleasing to the eye, but there are way to many pictures for my taste. I leave it up to you if you want to reduce them or not. Also

I appreciate the input.

I have been doing some experimentation as of late with different factors. I like the term somewhat, which is sorta what i was aiming at.

I did not want anything to directly stick out, however i wanted certain points to plant seeds, but not be obvious about it. I tried to make it general yet positive so they could relate yet still seem unique enough to be me.

I had realized that the length seemed much longer on the myspace compared to when it was actually wrote, however i was unsure if the seeds would be noticed as much if i made it shorter.

The pictures i was debating on taking some down that where sorta redundant. But its still a debate, since on one end pictures speak louder then words and women are emotion creatures, the images spark emotional response. But too many might blow the sense to the point of boredom. THe mind can only precieve 7 stimuli at any given time.

My main goal was to invoke a response simply from a carefree straight forward confidence that women tend to love.

Is this all something you feel was accomplished?

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"The greatest mistake you can make in life is to be continually fearing you will make one."

Your welcome. What term are you referring to? The dry poetry one? Anyway I see what you where trying to do now with "planting the seed", but I think you did more of the opposite if anything. I know you want to trigger a response from the girl. But you have to keep in mind that even on the Internet guys still have to make the first move. Girls are more likely to open up communication online, but don't expect it to happen to much.

If you want to increase the number of girls opening communications with you, I would advise you to read and learn some marketing. Marketing is all about using words as well as imagery to provoke you to buy something. And in this case you want girls to "buy" you.

I know with the internet its not as easy for women to open you as in real life. In real life i work with more non verbal communication and am able to get them to open me more often.

When i refer to planting the seed i mean more in the lines of a push pull routine. I use general statements that fit me, but being general they can relate to them more easily, so they have the feeling of already know me.

Each paragraph has a possible positive and a possible negative, so its an up and down, a high and low. when you read it all the way through you get the sense that you already know me, that im fimilar and down to earth. This is all seen after i made the initial contact, or after i had met them and added them.

As they read the ups and down they hear the rollercoaster song and get that image with the words.

This indirect communication is what i was looking for, which is of course easier for women to see being emotional more often then men.

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"The greatest mistake you can make in life is to be continually fearing you will make one."

to tell you the truth

i looked at your profile and i didn't really wanna sit there and read all of it lol

maybe im just really lazy or maybe its just too much reading

i found the most effective myspace profiles dont give alot of info


in your about me just keep it basic and short no girl i think really wants to read alot
they just want to be able to look at your profile and decide right then if they wanna chat with you

i suggest shortening the about me

try something that hits keys that show your confident, fun, outgoing and you want to surround yourself with people that are the same way

then i suggest taking off some of the pics you have on your profile and put up pics of you doing things you like to do on your profile

its easier that way for a girl to just scope over and make a judgement

put fun goofy pics, put pictures of yuo with girls, put pics of you doing something you like to do, put pictures with you and friends

i would limit it to about 10 or so pics
remember" a picture is worth a thousand words"

thats just my opinion in your profile

but the overall design and everything is awesome!
you did a good job!



cheers,


Hatch

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"Leave her better than you found her"

"Amateurs do it until they get it right, professionals keeping doing it until they cant get it wrong"

Thanks mike.

This whole myspace thing is not nearly as firmiliar as personal interactions. In personal interactions i sell myself through non verbal communication, so trying to vind a way to incorperate that into myspace is limited. I was thinking of placing a DHV story ive used with success as my about me, which is short and sweet and it deals with my understanding of people.

Then use various photos of myself more then the things i enjoy.

however im at debates with the who i would like to meet section, it seems to me to be a bit to long as well.

I do know that chicks tend to dig the life quotes i have on there, so maybe keep a few of them.

opinnions on those ideas?

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"The greatest mistake you can make in life is to be continually fearing you will make one."

yeah i totally get you
your kind of in a handicap because you dont have body language or anything like that
on your side


i agree with you on the people id like to meet section
definitely keep the life quotes! THOSE ARE AWESOME!
just shorten it
but the overall message you had was great!

my people id like to meet section is very basic then most but it just states:

<b>Dorky Girls. I don't know why I like dorky girls but I do. I love all women, but I just keep going back to dorky girls.

I guess I am just looking for someone to.....<br/>
<br/>If you are cute rather than hot, clever rather than cool,<br/> dorky rather than bitchy,petite rather than slim, then I would like to meet you. As long as your not the stalker type </b>

short sweet hits the basic key points
of course yours will be different cuz you have different things you look for in people lol




yeah put pictures that just show who you are and why people should get to know you
put fun goofy pics, and throw in some really awesome pics up on your profile
so when girls go on they can just scroll down and glance and by then end they will be saying to there self "i wanna get know this guy"



hope some if not all of this has helped

cheers,

Hatch

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"Leave her better than you found her"

"Amateurs do it until they get it right, professionals keeping doing it until they cant get it wrong"

Of course it helps.

lol However, have you not seen my profile pic, i mean seriously, the moment they see that they already say " i want to get to know this guy" Im one sexy devil...

ill work on it this weekend, and post up when its done so people can take another gander at it.

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"The greatest mistake you can make in life is to be continually fearing you will make one."

Ok the rework is down, take a peek and see what everyone thinks.

Of course i expect constructive criticism.

Im still in debates on my main photo, currently im using one that rated really high on hot or not.....

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"The greatest mistake you can make in life is to be continually fearing you will make one."

I am not sure if it is better than your last one really in some ways I think it is worse. As you got somewhat of an AFC tone in there. Its more exciting tho. Not sure about the new photos tho. You may also want to make the font either a cleaner font or make it bigger as it is a tad hard to read. As well as make your profile more alpha like.
I wouldn't put that much value into hot or not. Its certainly a good way to generally tell how good looking you are in your photos but thats really it.

how about never trust a man with white shoes?

Hey, you look like you can give me good advice!!!

OK...Fair.

Its actually amazing the perspective i get on my own profile when im more awake, thats sad.

The AFC tone you speak of, your talking about the staying up late part on the about me?

More alpha like in which ways? i see the wording could be changed, it sounds a bit uncertain for my tastes now that i view it with a clear mind.

As you say stock in hot or not is a little iffy, i have noticed that the majority of the people will hit a 3, 5 or 7 just to get ratings. However its a good judge to see how your picture stands out.

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"The greatest mistake you can make in life is to be continually fearing you will make one."

well having some time today, i stopped thinking and did what i do best, experience.

i rewrote everything, i realize i need new pictures since the ones i have are of last fall. But only time can give me those.

enjoy...

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"The greatest mistake you can make in life is to be continually fearing you will make one."