First post to the forum. This just happened to me (yes actually happened) and I thought it would be a great story to use. I'd use it early on in response to a question like "So, what do you do?"' My style is to get the group rolling on the floor and have been successful in using this in just day time talk to random strangers. Haven't field tested. I use a lot of detail words, swears, and hand gestures. I'm a pretty good storyteller already but would like to ask some questions. It would go something like this. (I will fill in more than what I wrote obviously)

Them: "So, what do you do for a living?" or "So what do you do?" etc...

Me: I all do all sorts of shit. Like check this out...

OR

Wouldn't you like to know? Well here's a small taste....

Last weekend my buddy and I were bored and went to go see a movie (whatever was recently playing). We go and leave my apartment walk through the grass and to my car. I turn on keys and in about 5 seconds, I shit you not, my car smelled like complete shit. I didn't notice it and my roommate didn't feel like mentioning it. *more detail* (roommate wondering what the hell I'm going to do). "Just be cool I say, it's fine." We get there basically I sit next to people in the theater with my shitty shoe on my knee (demonstrate how). Start dangling it around etc... (then I talk about how fast I get people to move). Some guy was talking during the movie I got up and sat 1 char away from him. Made him smell shit for the rest of the movie. He lasted 3 minutes and then left. Roommate was watching this the whole time (me forcing people to switch seats all movie).

Alright my question isn't if this story will be good because I already know this is good shit. It's the following:

1. Should I make myself the man who stepped in dog shit or a friend? Does it DLV for me or does it show the group that I can make a fun time out of a shitty situation? I want to think that I should make myself the one because in real life I was the one who did it and how cool would it be if I talked about my friend.

2. Should I tell the story as if the movie were a Friday night opener where the theater is packed and I sit in the middle and force 20 + people to watch the movie standing in the back? Maybe add moving around the theater to piss people off. Or tell the group I plan on doing it when Harry Potter comes out with when the audience is full of little kids.

I read the original post and he adds a whole bunch of shit like losing his car, getting kicked out of his house so the group can ask questions later. I'm not sure if I have that in this story. If you can think of any way to add that element feel free.

Ed Frohman
Sausage King of Chicago

It seems pretty terrible to me, and you seem like a dick.

Sorry mate but he's right, it sounds fake like your putting it on, just be normal but whitty if possible. You sound like your trying to be too cool.

so it won't work because it doesn't sound real? And dicks get chicks. If anyone wants to respond on why they think the story sucks feel free. I'll test it out anyway to see whose right (if I think the time/target is right). I'll let you know how it goes.

I wasn't two fond of it / didn't find it humorus
1) too much vulgar language will make you sound ignorant.
2) the it sounded was you were trying to hard to be funny
3) It's not a very good story to convey a great energy about life.
4) I could see someone telling the story getting uncomfortable real quick and/or the people listening saying "yeah..... >.>"

These are just my opinions.
Go try it. If it works more power to you.

The girls getting creeped out is a possibility. I was gearing it more toward a group (not all girls) but guys mostly. Just shooting the shit with guys at a bar. Girls would probably think it's gross. I mean hell I can give two fucks what the girls think. I'm trying to get them attracted to me and I'd use it to win the guys and thus the group (which I thought DHV was). That's how it works in theory right? I was thinking that if I could win over her guy friends with a story like this because it shows I can make a fun time out of a shitty event (my smelly shoe) and a willingness to try anything. Obviously I'll have a read on the guys and what we're talking about to see if they can handle the story OR if there is a natural entrance into the story (we're talking about crazy shit we've done etc...). Personally, that's what the game is. Determining which tools to use in which situations. This story would be retarded in the comfort stage unless she was into crazy shit like that. The cocky/funny attitude is for the attraction and that's what the story would be for. The other question I have is early on Mystery says you should be accounting for about 90% of the conversation. How is that not trying to be too cool or harness attention. Seems like a contradiction.

It very well could be succesful. Hey It is a rough draft as typed right? it could be cleaned up an made entertaining. I agree that you would have to read the people you are talking to to make sure it would be more fit towards the group. You have to be full of excitement and interest but have it seem real if it already isn't so. You over analysized my trying too hard to be funny. I just pictured it as a staged commedian trying to hard to hard to make the crowd laugh, thats all.

Tell me how it goes if/when you use it. I'd be interested to know.