This is good . . . but you're "telling" them your passion instead of demonstrating it. If you had 20 seconds for a radio spot ad, your pitch would be perfect. But if you've already opened up a set irl and the hbs are all ears for you, I'd think more towards the story/demonstration route.

Men are all about straight forward statements. I think women . . . well, they're more into the stories, especially ones where they can identify with a character in the story. You always hear women say something like, "I really identified with _____ in that movie." What they're saying is that while watching that movie, they've mentally put themselves in ______ character's shoes. Women lose themselves in stories.

So . . . I'm sure you have plenty of real stories to use but I'd think that a story about a singer in a rock band or a model who called you for a house call so that she could turn her bedroom into a rock stage or a French bed & breakfast or a Swiss Ski Chalet would spark more interest than something that sounds like a high powered job interview. Hell, even a story about some college kid who misses her bedroom at home . . . "awwwwww . . . "

Keep it quick, to the point, and demonstrate your passion. Then, you just move on to, "What would be your dream room? . . . Island resort? Lake cottage?", etc . . .

HB, "blah blah blah?"

Lifestyle Creator, "Blah blah blah right back to you." - translation = a little neg! Ha ha ha . . . Then seriously, "Hey actually, that's not so bad! We have this sofa from ______ and it would be perfect for something like that."

Lots of directions to take this routine. But it begins with identifying whether your target is a wannabe "rock star", "model", etc . . .

u have nice job i work at mcdonalds

Hi there,

I've been a Flair Bartender, a Dueling Pianoplayer and a Club DJ.
(slightly exaggerated, but very close to the truth!).
Could anybody else mention examples of jobs that attract girls?

I work in corporate finance...

Until now I am almost embarrassed to tell people what I do as everyone just switches off.. How do I make it sound interesting or what kind of story should I come up with?