Ima leave something upto you...those all sound like great ideas and you should develope them all...but i dont have enough details on any of them to make a story....so, you pick one you like and want me to help with and post some details about it, i will help rewrite it for you and will be more then happy to check any other stories you come up with

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Ka, I tried out my DHV story this weekend, and I think it needs some work (the one I posted in this thread). It might have been my delivery, but it just came across as bragging.

I think I'm going to have to rework it somehow, any ideas? Also, one HB said, "so you think I look like a crazy person?" which seems like a good response in a flirty situation, but I didn't handle it well and lost the flow of conversation massively. Doh!

It seems like just when things start to come together, the prize gets further away!!

No no no no no....please no. Fighting is almost never a DHV. Very rarely is it ever a good sign to a women if they hear about or see you fighting.

Protector of loved ones doesnt really literally standing up for loved ones physically...rarely, but usually its referring to you provideing emotional and verbal support to them. Doing the right thing and self sacrificing.

Im not a women, so i cannot tell you what feeling it evokes in them, but my understanding is that fighting usually tells them that you could possibly be violent with others, including them.

Also your story shows you protecting yourself, not your friends...you let them take some shit and wait til he comes at you. Thats your choice im not downing you there...but story wise standing up for yourself isnt the same as standing up for someone else.

Try and come up with a story or event that isnt related to fighting and ill be happy to help ya.

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Im glad you tried it, how many times did you try it, how soon into the set did you use it, what did you preface it with, how did they react to your story, why do you think they took it as bragging?

Also when the girl responded about looking crazy, did she saying it in a humorous, jokeing way, or did she come accross insulted.

Also keep in mind alot of the reaction could be the product of your body language and tonailty among other things. So if you only tried it once you wana try it many more times. You'll also notice that your story will be different the 10th time you tell it as compared to the first time...you will evolve the story without even knowing it.

So lemme know, like i said if youve only taken one or 2 shots at it try it many more times. If you consistantly get the same negative reactions from it then we can try and tweak it...or mayb it needs to be prefaced by a DHV story about you being in a band?

We will see. thanks for the feedback.

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Leadership/ Takes care of friends
Me: So the craziest thing happened this weekend
Her: ???

So me and my friends went to the movies, it was night time already. Most of us had a little bit to drink before the trip, except the driver of course. Anyways one guy of the group was blasted already, he couldn’t even walk three feet without almost falling. So we purchased our tickets for 10, 000 BC crappy movie, and we were in the lobby in a circle just kicking it before the movie and the drunk dude, Michael, was looking pretty bad. He was spitting on the carpet floor, and I could tell something bad was going to happen.

So I took initiative and im like “aye guys, lets take this dude to the bathro” Michael was already vomiting on the floor before I finished. Puke after puke, it was a big ocean of barf on the theater’s carpet floor. The worst thing was there was a security guard like 5 feet behind Michael, so I noticed that and I told the group to form a line so the guard wouldn’t see it but it was impossible to cover that big ass lake of barf. Four of the dudes of the eight just vanished out of there, not tryin to get in trouble.

Me, my cuz, and the dudes cousin stayed with Michael and talked to the security guard and well the dude was cool he let us stay and watch the movie but we had to take Michael home. UGH did I mention the stupid ass was still barfing while we were talking to the guard. We had a big ass crowd of people watching my stupid friend barf. We took Michael outside and went to my cousin’s nice ass ride, Infinity G35 but Michael’s cousin wanted to catch the flick so he’s like aye lets just throw this drunk in the bushes and we’ll pick him up later. So he threw him in the bushes and im jus like… nah don’t do that let’s just ride him home. By the way the bush he threw him in was right next to the freeway entrance. My cuz was like fuck… he’s gonna vomit in my car, so we put a little towel on his lap and I sat in the backseat with him.

Half way to the house this dude starts having screaming fucking loud and is sweating like crazy. A second later he starts freaking having seizures, no lie. He’s steaming from his face and I’m like oh shit this dudes gonna die, take this foo to the hospital. So we drop him off in the hospital and his cusin stays with him we all then tell him to get better and we went back to the movies to pick up the four others.

Michael called us up the next day and turns out he had alcohol poisioning and his whole family went to the hospital to check up on him… hellaaaa big trouble for him

Haha the funny shit is he called us up a week later and Michaels’ like hey guys lets drink again, and were like HELL NAH yoo aint ever drinking in this house again hahaha.

It was a like one fourth of a water bottle too of Smirnoff that’s hecka weak sauce.


Good DHV story??? Insight please Or how can I reconstruct it to make it a more DHV story

Hey Ka can you help me in this DHV too? I think I made it come out really corny but im trying to hit the, how do I make it more romantic as well?

Romantic/ thoughtful part and there for friends as well

Romantic / Thoughtful
Me: Have you ever done anything really cool for your friends?
Her :blah blah
Me: That's cool, I did something pretty cool for one of my friends (name)
So I have this really good friend Melissa, she is one of those girls that are always happy, and cheerful and really friendly, really cute too. Every day I would always see her really happy, I would hug her and kick it with her for a while and have a good time. One day her boyfriend and her broke up and she suddenly changed. She wasn’t that cheerful girl, she was depressed and sad and just moped around the hallways. When I saw her I gave her the hug but their was only a small little smile and she went off, I let her be alone. This continued for like a while and I didn’t like seeing my friend like this so I decided to do something cool for her, and when I went back home that day I looked online for the best cursive letters I could find, since she liked writing in cursive letters, and I finally found some really cool ones and I copied them into a folded piece of paper and made it like a little letter. I wrote “I’ll always be here for you” in the front in this cool big cursive and inside I just wrote some nice stuff. I gave it to her the next day and that smile I remembered came back again and she was back to her nice self the following days.

The crazy thing is I saw her a few weeks ago, I haven’t seen her for soooooooo long, for like two years. And the first thing she said when she saw me was Thank you, you really helped me back then. And she gave me a little kiss. I looked at her and I said, no problem… always remember though i’ll always be here for you..

Ive got two pretty interesting events.

I went skydiving on my 16 birthday, two years before the DZ usually let people my age go, I jumped with my Dad.

Second is I was on my school's snowboard racing team and I placed last in the first race but the second I ended up beating the guy who was hoping to go pro.

ABC outta the 2 stories this seems to me to be infinatly better. While it may seem AFC'ish to you, or cheesy/corny, it has many good points. You were looking out for loved ones and your willingness to emote about it.

The other one shows some leadership qualities but they are common, just about anyone you ever come accross will have helped a drunk friend out. Not to say that a story about helping a drunk friend out couldnt be a DHV, i just feel yours was typical and while your story telling skills arent bad, your drunk friend story didnt have anything incorporated into it to seperate it from every other similar story.

Now im not knocking your choice, but the drunk story woulda been better if you stayed with your friend at the hospital.

All in all i think your second story is the better of the 2, give it a try...do it closer to comfort then to the opener.

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You guys gotta give me a paragraph or 2 at least, i cannot take 1 sentance and turn it into a story no matter how good your sentance is.

Feel free to take either story, write it as if you were telling someone, and i will do my best to help you.

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I dont understand leadership then, how can I express that good?

I felt it would be a very long story too and its hard to keep the attention on those :/

To be honest, i think the strongest displays of leader of men/leadership are by example...stories usually dont convey that very well.

While your story definatly touches on this concept, its not abnormal...like i said its very common for friends to do what you did thus it doesnt display that leadership quality in a genuine way since even a beta friend could do this...its an obvious choice given the situation.

A story showing you making executive descisions and leading a group away from the obvious path would be better to illistrate leadership. For instance had you convinced your friends not to drink, and then had a positive outcome because of it, would show that not only are you willing to lead, but you do it outside the bounds of obvious descision makeing. (Just a lax example).

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I dunno if your still doing this but I have a cool story that i never can seem to tell right.

On my 18th birthday I went skydiving with my good friend that I've know since birth lol. The briefing where they taught us what to do in emergencies was only like 5 minutes long so that made me a little nervous that i had to know how to save my life in that sort 5 minute demonstration.

Once we got to our altitude in the plane the chick infront of me jumped and that signaled my instructor to near the door.. then we jumped, very soon after that i realized i couldnt breathe! after like 10 seconds i figured out that u have to close your mouth to breathe lol... The chute opened fine and we did a stand up landing which students dont usually do, they land on their butts but i did it and i was happy to see the ground.

I don't know if thats enough info, i just wrote some of the main points. Help me all mighty Ka!

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Haha, you can bow if you like but i do not require it.

Seriously though its a good story, has a humorus element to it, as well as showing you like to take risks. however if i were you id spice in some more emotions to it.

Was it a nice day, whatd it feel like, what where you thinking as you where in the air, did you have to push your friend to do it?

So my version would be something like:
"Ive got a friend ive known forever, and i wanted to do something really kickass for my 18th birthday. So after convincing my friend, i made plans to go skydiving!

So we get to the place and the saftey briefing was only like 5 mins long....i was a bit uneasy with that, i mean in 5 mins im suppossed to know everything about how to not get killed? Then again i suppose you jump 10,000 feet and if your chute doesnt open theres not much your gonna do to stop the plop!

Flying up i could tell the chick in front of me was nervous, so i told her, "Dont worry noone has ever jumped out of a plane and not made it to the ground." I saw she lightened up a little.

Once we got to our altitude in the plane the chick infront of me jumped and that signaled my instructor to near the door.. then we jumped, very soon after that i realized i couldnt breathe! after like 10 seconds i figured out that u have to close your mouth to breathe lol... The chute opened fine and we did a stand up landing which students dont usually do, they land on their butts but i did it and i was happy to see the ground. Was really an experience i think everyone should try at least once."

This makes it a bit longer, and i usually dont but i took the license of adding a lil extra in there...but its not the core of the story, its flirting not lying

Also keep in mind that a huge part of storytelling is your tone, your facial expression and your BL....these things need to be congruent with what your saying.

Hope you like it, cool story i plan on trying skydiving soon, and to be honest i have a phobeia of hieghts.

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Cool thanks for the story I like it... And im afraid of tall buildings and mountains and such but with skydiving u have a friggen parachute attached to u lol!!! do it its a blast

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i need your help bro if you could email i would like to ask a experienced guy im not a chump i can get girls i jus wanna master the game and i will but i need everyones help, this is fun hit me up please ,

this peice hlped me relize what ive been doing wrong alota of times,but i also need help wit next day

sometimes when i get the number or i fzuck a random girl from the club i dont know what to talk about the next day when we wake up or if i call a girl i meet at da club im willing to talk on the phone its not akward for me, people willin to help hit me up

keelaybrown@yahoo.com i stay in la im even willin to go out and learn from the masters