| ^agreed.
I think you make it work, but you need to reframe the group dynamic. I understand the value of having the ex in the story and you should definitely keep it, but evaluate the situation as if it was just a bunch your buds hanging out, having a good time, and some ugly chick comes out of nowhere and starts hanging all over him. How would you react to that? Probably let him twist in the wind a little, laughing your asses off, then bailing him out, and never ever letting him live it down.
Take that response, modify and apply to your ex. For a little something extra, thow in how she was pantomiming for you save to her while keeping the other guy from noticing.
So instead of it being "my ex girlfriend and a few of our friends," it becomes "my friends, one of whom happens to be my ex."
It will communicate that the emphasis is on the current state of your relationship, just friends, nothing more, nothing less. Where the way you put it initially placeds the emphasis on the PAST nature of the relationship, which is what gives off the needy AFC vibe.
You can also use this as an opportunity to engage in some light kino, move the set around, re-enact it, really ham it up. One of the most important aspects of good storytelling: SHOW don't TELL. Make them a part of the story and when the punch line(s) drop(s), it will help to avoid the awkward "i thought it was funny, guess you had to be there" vibe. _________________ No regrets, no failures, only lessons learned.
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