A lot better! I'd just change 3 things....
- put some smiley face after "if you're lucky"... need to be cocky but not narcissistic...
- instead of "if you aren't boring", say "if you think you can keep up"... sounds a lot nicer.
- Change the pic of you in the bathroom to one where you're smiling.... or just delete that one... the rest are perfect IMO...
BTW, feel free to experiment... The more cocky and assholish you are, the more hot, shallow, mildly retarded girls you get... The nicer you are, the more plain/rotund, deep, smart girls you get... This is of course a gross generalization, but seems to be true in my experience. I have been opened by HB9's and UG0's... When you have swarms of people opening YOU, you kind of start to feel like the hot chick in the club... lol... it's fun!