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I've always got room for another internet stalker, submit applications below. Make sure your CV is in order, as we don't bring just anyone board.
Get rid of this or reword it so its more cocky. Its bit cheesy where it stands.
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Gonna be blunt for a second, here. Being pretty, hell, even visually stunning, cannot make up for being boring. I don't care if you're a genius or have an IQ just north of 85. Just don't be dull. (ie. be able to carry a conversation)
While we're at it, let's drop all the adjectives. Sure, you think you're fun, exciting, and witty. A snail going 2 feet in half an hour thinks its making great time, too! If you're exciting, tell me an exciting story. For all I know, you have a blast watching paint dry. Don't waste my time!
Redo this. Your on the right track as far as not wanting a boring girl. But make it more to the point if you will and not so drawn out. Something more on the lines of "Don't care how attractive you are if you are boring best not to waste my time". See the difference?
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My interests are far too numerous to list here, and it seems like I'm always adding to them, but if it's thought provoking, unique, funny, creative, artistic, philosophical or adventurous then I probably like it! A lot!
This is good but expand on it some.