So, I'm an artist in Cali and I know this other group and there's a girl in it that I'm trying to game. I've met them before but it was very casual stuff. So I thought I'd invite them to do a show with us, here's our live convo, going on now, please tell me what you think. Feedback is appreciated.

Me: Hey, I'm looking for HER NAME the famous singer, have you seen her? Ha
Her: Haha well I'm not famous but my name is X and I sing lol. (Right off the bat she seems very receptive)
Me: Close enough, ha. So we may perform in ABC town; would you like to do a show with us

(I went with my last message because I wanted to state my intention and not mess around so she knows why I'm messaging her than tease her from her response. How did you think I did)
I'll keep you guys updated as we go along

If your intent was to get her to do a show with you, it was done perfectly. If your intent was to let her know that you found her attractive, it wasn't there.

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What was her response to your last message?

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yeah man. Sounds like a business pitch.

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Legit sounds like business. No flirting playfulness, asexual frame. Do you have a penis?

Well it was a business pitch. Here's the thing, I know their family very well and I'm about to see them in a few days in person so I'm just keeping it light. She hasn't responded yet.

1. I'm interested though, instead of me suggesting the important stuff, what would you have said for the 2nd message.

You tell me, not going to do the thinking for you.

This is confusing. What did you find about her first response as being very receptive before you stated your business opportunity? Why are you trying to tease a girl when you are trying to make a business deal?

It feels like you're trying to bullshit us. You're original statement is that you're trying to game her and therefore that was the intent behind your messages. Now all of a sudden the purpose was a business deal.

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I understand Jack. Quick explanation, look at the comment in my first post "I went with my last message because I wanted to state my intention" In other words, I really am contacting her because I want them to be involved with us that also ties into game because I can speak with them in person, both work. I'm trying to avoid being overtly flirtatious/sexual because we're in the same professional social circle and you know the rest. 

So, I realized that I one of the reasons she hasn't responded was because I I sent her a message around 5pm she got back to me at 111, I texted her at 12, she read it but didn't respond because it was so late. My mistake.

As for another message maybe, "Are you sure you're not famous? I heard you were touring with Taylor Swift. Make sure to be nice or she'll write a song about you." Just an idea. I'm open for critique. I know lots of guys come here and want to be spoon fed, I get it. For me, once I see a working example, I'm able to imitate it perfectly and come up with my own style.

You're working backwards and pushing yourself into being her buddy. You need to talk to her like a girl that you want to seduce and not work with. You are more likely to get her to have sex with you and decide to work with you rather than work with you and then have sex with you. Or maybe you have more experience in making girls your friend and then turning them to someone who you can have secx with.

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Exactly, Jack. It's over FB and I don't want to really over do it, I rather be a bit more subtle and indirect then strike when I know it's time. Btw, she responded with "Yes, definitely! Let us know when! "
I'm thinking of responding with:
1. Sure, since you're famous I hope it doesn't interrupt your tour with Taylor Swift (insert Taylor Swift joke here)
2. Sounds good, you have it so easy being an acoustic band, I got to lift tons of heavy equipment on stage and look good doing it, ha

Neither line I like. If you're doing business, keep it at business. If you were making a move fine...but dont try to backdoor it after offering someone an opportunity. You offered her a gig, so she's obligated to be nice to you and respond. Don't mix that with making her feel like she's now obligated to responding to your jokes.

Keep it as business or make it personal. If you see her in a few days, be normal and just game as a regular chick. Girls hate it when a guy uses a job or help as an excuse to get in their pants.

This and...
You don't have to text her at all. You know you're going to see her and it seems like you are forcing it.

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Great points guy. I actually haven't replied just leaving it like that. I agree a lot with what you said Neo, really great opinion.

When it comes to communicating, it can be a bit difficult for me. I can come across as try hard or generic. How can I learn how to communicate with a women better.

Thanks for all your help guys, really enjoying how awesome this forum is. Everyone is always super helpful and friendly

Practise on dating websites, that way she is expecting of you to ask her out

Better yet, get out of the house and talk to women

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