Hi, I was just hopeing some of you could check out my online profile to see if there is anything wrong with it. I think it may be a bit too wusy but i just dont know.

Feel free to critisise it as long as its gona be helpfull

So here it is

http://www.okcupid.com/profile?u=invader_zim_

Thanks guys

Zim,

I'm probably online more than most meeting women. I do it as a side project and I am in the process of working on some sort of online dating manual. I'm not saying I'm an expert but after 8 years of being online I do pretty well. I hope that some of my suggestions will help.

One of this first thing I notice and women will notice is your pictures. I like the fact you have multiple pictures, and that you have both face and body shots. That way you are being honest with what you look like. This might not be possible immediately but I always recommend your pictures showing you doing something active that you like doing if possible. But you have a good start there.

From reading your profile I know that you are laid back and outgoing. You don't really describe yourself that much, although you do take some time to go into your interests and what you like doing. I would include a little more about what you are like. Secondly, include something somewhere about what you are looking for. What should she be like. What should she like doing. You don't have to put together a checklist just two or three important qualities you'd like to have in a woman.

I like that you left the topic of religion blank, that rules out a lot of argueing if you are opened minded about it. I know many people will rule people in or out based on this one little category which is hardly fair but it happens.

The lastly, on the part where you said, "I am still living the student life, I guess i am milking it for as long as possible before i have to find work. Though work wont be too bad and ill get to work in a lab helping to develope drugs or cure diseases. Thats if i finaly manage to finish of my degree. " I would work out a way to rephrase it to make it sound a little more optomistic. I wasn't that happy to leave school either and I liked being a student but be a little more upbeat. Maybe say, "I am still living the sudent life and loving every minute of it until I have to go into the "real world." When I complete my degreee, it'll be awesome though because I'll be working in a lab to develop drugs or cure diseases."

Hope it helps buddy! Cheers!

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Ok, thanks for that, i have changed it but may still work on it bit more.