The Dear Ghost
Ok so me and my friend tom decided to go to this abondoned house wear this lady was killed and thrown down the well until her body was found months
later.know i'm a bit skeptical when it comes to believing in ghost, but i'm always up for an adventure. (do you believe in ghost? or had any supernatural
experiences?) so we go to this abandoned house way out in the country in the middle of nowhere. This house looked scarier then any house potrayed in any
hoarer movie i've ever seen! So we go to the house and look down this creepy well, but tom was a bit to nervous to go in the house, and i'll admit it made
me a little nervous too and normally i don't get scared easy. Ok So we decide to leave the house and as were leaving i see this dear standing at the edge of
the road watching us leave but it had no reflection in its eyes. That creeped me out a bit so we turned the car around to get a second look at the deer, and
we slowly drove closer,..but still no reflection in the deers eyes and it wasn't moving. Let just say by this point my heart was racing, but then finally it
ran away and we just kind of laughed it off and turned the car around in the drive way. But the story isn't over...as we were driving down the road out of
the corner of my eye i see at the edge of the field the deer just staring at us with still no reflection in its eyes!

any advice would be apreciated. wasn't sure if it could work that well for a dhv story.

When I read this the only DHV I see is when you say you are adventurous. Then later you get too scared to go in (which is fine, but slightly contradicts your DHV). An interesting story, but remember that the best DHV stories consist of Wealth, Status, and Pre-selection *Magic Bullets provides this information*

Oh and be passionate and descriptive when it comes to emotions. I would want to know why the house was scarier than any house you had ever seen in a horror film. Was it the creaky steps and ominous rustling in the bushes? Passion makes a story exciting.