Okay, so I was reading Revelation and came across the guide on how to make your own story to DHV. Before I do this story I will do a magic trick or two or else the story won't make sense. Here it is;

"So there was this one time when I invited some of my magician buddies to come eat dinner with me at a restraunt and these girls that liked us at the time showed up, as well." (This demonstrates pre-selection) "My buddies and I had been entertaining these chicks with all sorts of magic, as time grew on I could feel the stares of other people from different tables as these two girls were hollering about how good we were. Then, soon after we ordered our food and the tension in the room had died down, my friend gets this crazy glint in his eyes and decides to do a trick that he saw on the internet." (This is to add some emotion into the story)

"So he gets their attention, pulls a box of matches out from his jacket, and with this huge grin on his face just lights the match and sticks it in his mouth, holding the match in there with just his teeth! His smile had this odd jack-o-lantern glow to it as the light from the match came out. Now, what that video did not tell him was that when you breath in with the match, that all of the heat in your mouth is going to go rushing down your throat, so when he breathed, his face shriveled up and he started going ecstatic as he thought he had swallowed this match!"

"I didn't know what was going on since he couldn't talk with a lit match in his mouth, so since I was the one who had brought everyone here and because he seemed to be in pain (this shows leadership and protection of loved ones), the first thought that rushed into my head was to call 911. Yet, just as I was about to press the Call button on my junky touch-phone, I heard my friend say "No, stop stop stop!" and then I heard a splash and felt water drops hit my hand that was on the phone. So I look up, and there my friend is; soaking wet with the match in his hand, unlit, and a look of disgust that could have made the whole room feel uncomfortable. Apparently, the chick that had liked him threw what was left of the water in her cup and had splashed him right as he realized that everything was okay and that he had just gotten the match out of his mouth! I don't think those two ever talked again, or that he has ever performed that trick for anyone else." *laughs*



So tell me what you guys think of it. Is it too long, could I remove some stuff, should/could I add more DHVs, am I accidentally giving off any DLVs?