Good DHV story or no? It's pretty long, but most of it is true so it's not hard for me to tell. I'd like to shorten it, so if there's any bit you think is unnecessary, let me know.

In a nutshell
Partied at the playboy mansion. Stood up for a woman. Introduced her to some friends at the party, and as a result of her knowing me, it changed her life.

What do you do (for a living)? v1.0 (could also just be a comfort story)
I write. You know, magazines… stuff like that. It’s actually a lot of fun. Like, I was up in LA not too long ago to cover some event going down at Hef’s house. And while I was there, I met the sweetest girl you’d ever meet. I mean, you’d think being a playboy model she’d have like, this massive ego? But I got to talking to her and she was really such a doll. She introduced to me some of her friends, and I don’t know if it was infectious or what, but they were all the same way. I mean you’ll meet some girls down here sometimes (where we are now) that think they’re the shit (yeah right look), as if anyone is that important, but these girls had their heads on straight, so I didn’t mind sitting down and chatting a bit.

Somehow, we got to talking about the after party that was going down later in the night. They knew I just flew in, so one of the girls asked me how I was getting to the party. Now, I didn’t know anything about a party. I mean I was just going there to work, check out the city a bit… maybe hit up a club, you know, then just head back to the hotel. I didn’t even have an invite. They said no no no… you know, don’t worry about it. We’ll take care of it. You should come.

So I was like, alright alright alright… So I get back to work, finish what I have to do, and head back to the hotel to kill a few hours. By the time I got back to the Mansion, there was just this massive drove of people trying to get in, and I was already a bit late. So i’m shifting through people, you know, pullin off a few jukes, a couple spin moves, I think I did the… uh... the heisman pose at one point (Heisman pose, with just arm, laugh). So I get up to the front and I'm thinking i'm safe. You wouldn’t believe it. Not on the list. My stomach DROPPED! At this point I’m standing there, you know, and I look like every other guy saying “no no, check again; check again I’m on the list” (laugh). But of course he’s not hearing it. There must have been… (thinks)… like three hundred something people around me, and I swear not two seconds later, that sweet girl somehow spots me outside and waves me in. I mean I was this (finger sign) close to being swallowed by the crowd.

So I get in, and the first thing I notice is all the women at the party had to come in lingerie or they weren’t allowed in. So if you/yall showed up and didn’t have any cute lingerie, you/yall’d be screwed (laugh/touch) (a girl might give you an IOI here by validating herself, saying that she does have some cute lingerie, likely to another girl). Guys. you know, they had to be a little more formal than that (laugh). No guys in lingerie… at least that I saw (smile). The second thing I noticed, like, immediately, was just how packed this place was. I mean they had these poor girls there in these bunny costumes they hired as severs, walking around serving food? It was the saddest thing, because you could barely take two steps without running into someone, and these poor girls had on high heels with plates of food and glasses. Some guy made me sick to my stomach at some point, he was just standing there blowing up at one of these girls for spilling something on him. This guy was just going off on her like she was trash, and what’s worse is she was just standing there TAKING it! I mean, she doesn’t know these people. This is a pretty important guy, and she was just hired to serve food. So she’s just taking all of his crap. So I walked over to the guy during all this, and I must’ve said about two words before his eyes got so wide... I’ve never seen a guy do such a complete 180 in my life. I mean this guy just flipped a switch and was all; "oh I’m so sorry… I’ve just had such a hard day, I’m so sorry. I’m sorry honey." I think he was just so petrified that he thought I would write something about it, you know? And work was the last thing on my mind.

So, one of the guys running the event saw what happened, and I guess he didn’t want the girl to make a big deal about it? So he told her to take the night off, and enjoy the party. So we had a ton of fun.. Long story short, later in the night we met back up with those sweet girls that got me in, and after I introduced them, they became like, best friends... which totally makes sense now because they were such nice people, but at the time they were on like totally different levels of the social kingdom. Like, you wouldn't believe these girls were friends by the end of the night. Well, last I heard, they helped her start a modeling career, and she’s not serving anymore. Isn't that crazy? I mean, how you can meet someone and change their lives forever in just one night?

If asked the names of any of the girls, or the guy that is being a jerk
Haha... what happens at the mansion, stays at the mansion.

Includes:
Preselection
Leader of Men
Protector of Loved Ones
Deeper Understanding
Willingness to Walk Away
Willingness to Emote
Vulnerability High
Value/Status
Social/Friends
Standards
Kino

I know this story can be entertaining, but I'm supposed to be attracting, not entertaining. And I'm worried this might be a little too long to hold attraction.

well, you've conveyed just about every DHV spike there is, so that's perfect. the only thing i can say is shorten it up a little. just cut anything remotely unnecessary and you've got yourself a winner