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jonmo90
PostPosted: Thu Jan 20, 2011 9:08 am 
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I need my POF profile to be critiqued or fixed. I want to put cocky and funny in the profile. But I do not know exactly what to say. So please give me suggestions to fix my profile and make it stand out.


http://www.plentyoffish.com/viewprofile ... d=24032827[/url]
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daquix
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PostPosted: Thu Jan 20, 2011 3:27 pm 
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I realize that you're trying to make your profile cocky, but it's WAYYY too cocky.

There is a fine line between confident and cocky and you need to find it.

Also, fix the spelling and grammar.
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You're going for cocky, but come across as a dick.

"A woman that is as attractive as me is what I expect. If you are'nt. Get fixed up and then message me."

Really dude?

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Jambi
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Yeah TBH you sound like a complete ass-hole to me. So the only type of women you would attract would be the barbies who strut their stuff but then you tell them not to message you either.

What type of women are you after?
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luthor
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Yeah there's no sense of fun in there, no smiling in your photos either which makes your demands and you come off a bit negative.
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Take out "one night stand" "gold diggers" "control freak" and "wuss" those words will stick in her mind after she has read your profile, in fact you need to write an entire new one buddy.
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You come off like a dick and your pics aren't very flattering at all, I would start from scratch man
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