I must have remade my profile 10 times but still get a feeling it's missing something. Something that will lure them in without me messaging them.

I'm thinking of writing 5 qualities I have about my personality and DHV them through my profile.

DHV'ing is a skill I lack in as well. I tried story telling but failed. However, fail is only feedback so why not try something different.

My profile is http://www.okcupid.com/profile/PapaBear81

I'm wondering if a screen name makes a difference also. The good news is that I'm getting girls numbers left and right so that's good, but I have to message them first.

I know they check out the photos and then read the profile or verse visa.

Suggestions would be great! Thanks!

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My official underground website

http://f4fc0878.linkbucks.com

Ok, I think you look a little too tough both in your pics and in the writing.

Your first paragraph after your "what's up" bit seems like you feel like you need to validate yourself. A really confident guy wouldn't do that.

I like the part about blowing people off except I wouldn't say "I know how it feels and it sucks dick." I'd probably just not have anything after "I hate blowing people off".

Less chat about body building.

The next paragraph about the hobbies is great except I'd change "one a contest for it" to "won a contest for it".

No need for the last sentence in that section.

Add a 6th thing to your "six things I could never do without".

Overall it's pretty good, but like another poster's I don't think it shows enough personality. Girls will always say "I want a man who makes me laugh" and you want to show that you're funny, show some humor in there somewhere.

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i would get rid of or cut down the bodybuilding talk

I'm a web designer as well, and the wording just doesn't sound right.

" I'm a freelance Web Designer, as well as a Web Developer. "

The first things people usually notice about me
My eyes and smile.

Kind of generic, try to bring a DHV into it, and comment on a personality trait of yours.

Everscence, POD, Metallica, Enimen

is Everscene supposed to be Evanescence? Eminem is also spelled wrong.

Ages 18-66

change that from 18 to a respectable age, you want to seem like you have standards and don't need a dating site.

You can check it out! ipra site here

Change that to something like Check it out!, the changed tone of the sentence makes it come across as less asking. Other than that, the other advice is great as well. Try to play yourself up in a big way, and spell check it

I think you should downplay webdesign, just say you're self employed and up-play paranormal investigator. That's way more "exciting" and interesting. The good thing about the paranormal is that even intelligent quality girls believe in it and you'll probably find more spiritually inclined girls on okcupid than other places. You have a team, make videos and do radioshows. You can present yourself as the fearless investigator.