I spent maybe 5 minutes on it.. very new to the whole pua thing and online dating as well. hardcore afc.. I'm trying out the whole asshole/arrogant/cocky/funny thing. I might have overdone it with the manchine thing =\


This maNchine is going 200mph.. can you keep up?

I do have a very positive outlook on life, I consider life to be an empty plot of land that you build on top of. And I appreciate a woman is also optimisitic and shares the same vibration.

Likes:
-dancing
-bowling
-music
-movies
-picking my nose in the car when no one is looking
-(kidding on the last one)

Dislikes:
-smokers (if you're in the process of quitting, I might make an exception if you're special enough
-alcoholics
-raisin brand
-bums

The rest about me, you'll find out more of through chat.. the more I like you, the more about me you'll get to know

First Date
I like to keep it a surprise and is very circumstantial. If I feel like I need to know more about you, we'll do something that involves talking.. if I feel like I like you a lot already, we might do some activitiess

I take it this is for POF? But even if it is not, you best make anew one that involves paragraphs and not a list. The list makes you look boring and have no content to your self. It also oozes AFC as well as there is nothing cocky about it at all. You may find the link below of some use in making your profile.

http://www.seductionbase.com/seduction/ ... le/52.html

lets focus on the positive
i liked where you say you have a positive outlook on life... thats good
and the first item on your dislikes... the rest could use a little sprucing up

Thanks bro, I need all the advice I can get just like a cold splash of water.

Hows the new ad?



I am Seeking a
Woman
For
Dating

Do you drink?
No
Marital Status
Single
Profession
Professional Thumb Wrestler (undefeated)
Smarts
Some college
Do you want children?
Undecided/Open
Do you do drugs?
No
Do you have children?
No
Do you have a car?
Yes
Interests Bowling Movies Karaoke
fuck it wrestling with lions tigers and bears oh my


About Me
I'm a selfish prick.

I'm 5'11, athletic, toned, and couldn't give a **** about what people think of me. If I want something, I ****ing go for it. When I compete, I go for #1. I got trophies from from elementary school to prove it.. I'm a beast on the courts baby.

I'm also that ***hole who cuts in front of you on the freeway if you're going to damn slow, but is gentlman enough to hold doors open for you.

Oh, you want to know more? If I were to write a personal in a newspaper it'd be like this.. "I'm the sexually talented stud looking for a married cougar who wants to make her husband jealous in order to procure expensive gifts from him." When you're making love to your nice chump of a boyfriend, its me you're thinking about.

Welcome to the jungle.

First Date
I like to keep it a surprise.

Redpill your ad is better than what you had but it still needs work. First off take out the cussing. Ya I know the article I linked certainly led you in that direction, but would you open a girl up with cussing? I think not. Take out the elementary thing as well as the way you have it, it is DLV you, which is not a good thing. Also either reword or take out cutting off other drivers. Girls like guys that take risks, but not those type of risks. If you do take such risks on the road either don't mention it or reword it.

Also take out the newspaper ad thingy unless that is what you are actually looking for, which I some how doubt. But leave the jungle sentence in. Instead add content to your profile because right now it is not saying much about you. So either put in something that is DHV or tell a bit more about your self.

Here goes try #3.. its most shit i threw together from other people's suggestions

Hi, I'm a selfish prick, and to sum me up... well, the only thing more impressive than my rugged good-looks and irresistible charm is my INCREDIBLE MODESTY, and therefore, as a matter of speaking, I’m kind-of high maintenance; I enjoy being wined and dined: I prefer fifteen minute back massages, sex on the beach (DONT GET ANY IDEAS. I'm talking about the DRINK!) and my pillow fluffed every night before I go to bed, but Also, I'm creative and spontaneous: There’s nothing better than doing something random you never planned, and then ending up having the time of your life doing it, and In addition, I enjoy being surrounded by people who are childish at heart and can laugh at the TOTALLY dorky things I tease them for doing. Furthermore, I LOOOVEEE cakes and cookies, all sorts, and the women who can bake them; Plus, I love book recommendations: The Secret, The Power Broker, and Power, and anything else that emphisises how to succeed in life. Next, I laugh at guys who use corny pickup lines. Though "Your eyes are so blue, they remind me of Windex" and "I love your hair, it makes your head look normal" have been used multiple times, purely for my own self-amusement, and YEAH. If you think you're fun and unique, then show it to me, Or Otherwise, it's not going to work and I would probably just divorce you and take half your money anyways.

P.S. You don’t have to be a model to contact me; I prefer quirky girls that can stand out from the crowd.
P.S.S. Just so you know. I'm not just some piece of meat. I have feelings too.

Welcome to the jungle (yes, I'm listening to GNR right now).

Much better. There where a few grammar errors there. I would also take out the P.S.S line as it has a "uh?" ring to it.