The main thing I want critiqued, is my long paragraph. I was thinking this might be a technique to use in real life as well. Talk about how they didn't properly give me an IOI, gesture, etc... and how I'm not interested in that sort of interaction. It sort of serves as a neg, but almost like a neutral one. I would love for some feedback on classifying it, or whatever else you'd like to say.
I'd score her a half point higher than me on the looks scale. She is divorced and only came on match 2 days ago, so who knows what baggage.
Hahaha well cool, then. When I get back from the beach you should take me out for coffee 
-My Name
Ok. Have fun at the beach
This is when you give me your number.
Is it? lol
I'm not familiar with match.com protocol
I was a bit rude and direct with how I asked. But basically by offering to see you in the coming week, I would have expected some sort of gesture on your part. Otherwise it would force me to bring up the subject twice in a row, which would create a pattern of interacting with you I'm not interested in. I attempted to overcompensate though, and should have said something like "hey well it's been nice exchanging some message with you online, but I think it'd be a good idea to transition to text now- to keep things interesting" or something like that.
how about we just meet for coffee & see if we like each other in person?
If we do we, can exchange more information, phone numbers etc.
When you get back from the beach and we can pick a time/place to meet if you want 
CHAT
so that's all I wrote.