I've written below my profile information on a dating site, i'd just like opininons.....please? oh and thank you p.s. criticism is welcomed!!!(exclamation mark)!!

Prince charming at your service ladies *warning conversations with this person can and will be entertaining/interesting. Prolonged time spent conversing with this person will lead to helpless attraction to him*

im attractive etc. im romantic etc. i like walks on the beach etc. im adventurousn etc. im funny etc. im spontaneous, i like talking about feelings etc. i like working out etc. i like bitching about friends flaws and the fact that i bought that shirt before them, meaning they clearly idolise my style etc. i like grammatical erroars etc.(insert any missing desired qaulity you look for in a guy here)

On a serious note im an honest person who likes to joke around, have a good time(a rather redundant statement) likes acting(love it),anime,various sports,women(well the ones who can interest me beyond physical attraction), reading,poker, writing poetry/critiques/stories. AND more!!!

-Try using some punctuation.
-You come off as way too cocky! There is a fine line between cocky and confident and you crossed it. Also, you say nothing about what type of girl you are looking for.
-How does she know if she's the right one for you if you don't spell it out.
-Also, you could spend a little more time expanding on how you are adventurous...what types of stuff do you like to do. How are you spontaneous what was the last spontaneous thing you did.
-Don't cuss in your profile "bitching" use complaining instead if you must leave that in there.
-Have a call to action in your profile basically telling the girl to message you if they are into X like Y, etc.

This is pretty short and to the point but most men write like this cause they don't really know what to say about themselves. Try to make it different from the other 90% of people out there.

If it was me here is how I would word it. Has a similar effect but not nearly as cocky.

Prince charming at your service ladies! Side Effects: Warning conversations with this person can and will be both entertaining and interesting. Prolonged time spent conversing with this person may result in an amazing relationship.

My friends would describe me as being attractive, romantic, adventurous, spontaenous, easy to talk to, and trendy. When I have spare time I like working out, and spending time with my close friends. The last adventurous thing I did was....

I am an honest person who loves to joke around so it helps if you have a similar since of humor, and like having a good time. I can be serious when the time calls for it too. I really enjoy acting, anime, reading, poker, writing, all kinds of sports, also people who are intellectually and emotionally stimulating.

The girl I am looking for should be ...... and would be interested in .........

If any of this sounds like you then feel free to message me.

Definetly advice/criticism i needed and it was from you! thats awesome i was reading your column dedicated to advice on online sarging and am quite pleased im getting advice from a man of stature in this community.

Yeah i knew i was close to the line but wasnt sure if id crossed it.

By the way the 'im this and that etc.' part was sarcasm a poke at the stereotypical traits women supposedly look for in all men, but it definetly comes off as douchey so i will drop the sarcasm.

im going to pretty much use the re-edited version you wrote (of course personalised to me) and see if i get more hits.

also off topic, what are some online/text game books you would recommend ? also i apologise because im sure you've posted about what books before.

Your help is much appreciated, you the man

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If you don't give them any cards how can they beat you at the game ?

Ace - no disrespect but scrap the entire thing.

Ill pm you what works for me and you can adapt it to yourself (if you want).

The trick to getting mine looking good in the way it reads was my site www.rsvp.com.au has a top 100 ranking so you can get an idea of successful male profiles. I then took bits from others which were relevant to me and combined them to make my own.

Then when it comes to emails girls, do a search in this forum for 'the direct approach' far and away the best way to approach meeting women online.