http://www.pof.com/viewprofile.aspx?profile_id=52194855

Hello above is the link, currently got out of a relationship and decided to try out pof, im going to leave for boot camp in a few months so i was wondering what you guys thought about it and if there were any reviews you guys would change// modify.

thanks for your time and effort,
hoorah!

Good things:

- handsome young dude
- picks with girls looks friendly and not creepy (good job)
- heading to the military, shows responsibility and reliability.

Some things:

- use clear profile pic
- don't use mirror pics
- have friends take pics of you
- headline is bland
- "entrepreneur" sounds bogus. What do you really do. Don't lie.
- "I'll kick your butt" sounds like you're threatening them with violence.
- reading book pic looks like you're fake reading.
- correct punctuation
- MMA, cage fighting, firecracker wars, untamed energy ... Makes you seem violent
- remove cliches
- saying you like art sounds fake, because all you talk about are physical, fighting interests.
- first date: surprise me makes you look lazy (the guy is supposed to take care of the girl)
- status: no commitment and hangout makes it seem like all you want is sex and you don't care about people and aren't serious.
- capitalize first words of sentences. (All lowercase looks childish)

That's enough to get started.

Nothing makes you stand out at all.

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KCCO

All solid advice. I'd replace the fifth picture with a decent headshot taking by someone else, smiling or laughing naturally, and set it as the main pic. Sounds typical/cliche, but compare a nice picture to the other profile pics of men in your age range to see what I mean. Nearly all fall into two categories; bland or douched up. Ironically, having the stereotypical Glamourshots head shot will separate you from the crowd.