ok well i have seen some guys put their profiles up here to critique and personally i think its ok to just describe yourself but you need to stand out, seem fun, playful and really peak her curiousity about you. not only that but you need some fun pictures to show u have a fun life. i have like 2 good pictures of me just looking good, 3 of me travling and 2 of me partying. one is taking a beer bong and the other is a cheers with a bomb shot!

ok well here is an example of my profile. give me advice. i think it might help.

Who am I?...I am Spiderman....wait that was a movie! Hola! Im Chris and yes thats about the extent of my spanish! And for some reason i wish they had a "How to write your plenty of fish bio for dumbies book." I just moved to Golden for schooling. I am a complete goofball and random. I like to have fun and am usually smiling..i have heard its a little contagious! I am new to this area and I am trying to find some fun high quality people to hang out with and be around. I like to think the people that somebody has around them tells you a little about themselves.

I may seem like a frat boy or something from my pictures but i guarantee I am more than that! Tell me if you believe me after the first time we talk...if you have time to make a quick message and are willing to be silly. I do drink socially and if thats a dealbreaker then it was nice to have met (well kind of) i guess you had a nice read!! But i do believe in having fun whether its having a couple of shots and funny cheers moments with friends, to sitting in one of those oddly comfortable lawn chairs gathered around a table playing spades and talking.(or go-fish...i will kick ur butt in go-fish). I am quite sarcastic and feisty! So if you dont mind having some fun sarcasm, then im more than welcome to see how quick you are on your feet!

If you read this far and want to talk, why not?!? I talk to random people all the time. There's nothing to it and its damn good fun usually!

so this took a little time but not much at all. if you guys like it then here is an example and if not tell me why not. i mean im not perfect at online game but it hasnt hurt me so far. most of my closes are first or second nights with them!

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There is nothing wrong with your pictures showing that you are active outgoing and social. Although, I think two pictures of you drinking is a bit much. You even try to compensate for it by saying, "I may seem like a frat boy from my pics but I'm not."

Get some more pictures of you out and about. Maybe shooting hoops, playing pool, or whatever it is you do besides drink.
Please get rid of the... "And for some reason I wish they had a "How to write your plenty of fish bio for dumbies book." TONS of profiles start out with the "I don't know to say, but here goes...." or something along those lines. This doesn't display confidence and should be removed.

You do a descent job of describing your personality here which I think is great.
One of the things I'm noticing in all of this is you don't really describe the type of person you are looking for. Having a short paragraph about who you are looking for helps her identify... Wait this sounds like me... You do say you want to hang around high quality people, she needs to appreciate your personality, and your desire to socially drink. Is the girl you want adventurous? Is she the girl next door type? What? What qualities are you wanting?

I think making a few small revisions will help you be even more successful online.

Cheers,

JLS