Before i say anything, i would just like to mention that i am reading The Game right now and found out that there is another PUA named Maverick. Just so you know, I am going to change my name soon.

Here is my first attempt at online sarging and my analysis (it was on myspace). I would really appreciate it if some experienced PUA could maybe critique my work, focusing more on my analysis since it is my perception of what i did right/wrong. One part of the conversation was in the "mail" section and the other was in "comments". Even though they were both going on at the same time, they were irrelevant to each other, therefore, i am separating them.



"Comment" section

Maverick (commenting on a photo she took diagonally): u know, normally when somebody takes pictures at a crooked angle it usually means 1 of 2 things. either you have a chill/fun personality or you are a lil crooked up in tha head. i hope its not the second one (seriously though)

HB9.5: iv never hurd that before lol. im pretty sure its the first one lol.

Maverick: my photo teacher told me something like that. u dont seem to be quite as crooked as he is

HB9.5: Mr. (insert photo teacher's name)? lol

Maverick: heyyy u know him too! we like know somebody each other knows. how cool is that? dont tell him i said that though. im already on his bad side cause ive missed his class so many times. and im sure his worse side is even worse.

HB9.5: haha i had him last year. he hated me i was loud and never paid attention lol. and then always left during class. opps. haha yeah i wont tell him somthing he should already know lol

Maverick: and mr (photo teacher's name) doesnt like people to talk crooked about him behind his back. especially by mr i still need to take the test, a month later.

HB9.5: hahhaa niiceee




"Mail" section:

Maverick: cheers! do i know you? im curious cause i normally only let people be my friend if i know them alright.

HB9.5: i dont know maybee. lol u go to (insert my high school) so maybe.

Maverick: last time i checked, (my high school) is a big school. maybe i got u confused with someone else. its easy to do

HB9.5: only 3050 sum kids come on now. haha jk. yeah i gotcha

Maverick: ooo u got me bad... and what were we talking about agian? lol jay pee. --> because our school is soo big, iv made it a goal to go up and meet a new person every day. but since this is on myspace i guess this can only count as a half a person. is that ok with you, to be counted as a half a person?

HB9.5: hah no im not alright with this half a person non sence lol. nah its kool.

Maverick: ok fine. ill cut u a break. because i kind of made that hard for u, being a half a person and all, i will upgrade u to 3/4 of a person. ha. u know im only kidding. but seriously, meeting somebody on myspace is a lot different than meeting someone in person. know what i mean?

Maverick (after 10 min of her not answering): i have to go. lots of homework to catch up on. maybe i can count you as a full person sometime. as long as the other 3049 kids in the school dont get in the way whos counting anyway

HB9.5: haha alright. nott me thats for sure





ANALYSIS:

Positive
-decent opener. "Cheers"
-DLV'd target
-negged target somewhat
-sounded like i was fun
-no comments on her looks (which every other guy had done by the way )
-a couple quick-thinking saves

Negative
-Few DHV spikes
-Beat "half a person to death" and was nearly an insult, if not one.
-Too philosophical
-No cocky funny
-No false time constraint
-came off as a bad kind of jerk, not a fun jerk because of the "half a person to death comment"
-maybe need to relate better
-would have liked to get into a negging war (but i realize that it is harder to do over the internet than in person)



So what do u guys think??? any opinions are welcomed.