i think u just need to watch some examples of people telling good stories. on the net or in field. watch how they pause, laugh, build anticipation, talk slow ect. i used to be bad at the ending of my stories. i would build it all up n then just give it away without putting much emphasis on the punch line or ending. but i worked on it and now i fucking love telling stories.

ps i am a primary school teacher so i guess i get a lot of practice at telling stories and reading shit. 1 tactic i use at school is to speak softer and softer, even when its noisy its amazing to c how people stop talking loud and dial down ur volume just becasue u r.

hope this helps
good luck
g over

I'm not sure if we have different goals in PU, but I don't see us as being entertainers whatsoever. Entertainers to girls are those guys that just make them laugh and well entertain them, not seduce them or make them feel different sexually.
Just noticed that and my .02 cents

Do you have a deep monotone voice or is it high-pitched? What tempo do you usually speak at?