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| Author: | Ecudes17 [ Tue Mar 22, 2011 6:51 pm ] |
| Post subject: | little ruitine I invented |
Here is just a little story I made up in my head one day while at the gym. It has been field tested so save your breathe. "Do you believe it's possible to have an orgasm without being touched" "blah blah w.e" "ok get this. I have a friend who has a problem getting hard when he's with women. I don't know if he has the same problem when he's alone I'm not gay so i didn't ask. Apparently he was with a girl one day and things where getting hot and heavy. His penis finally decided to work. He tells the girl that he's going to "wash up" and goes to the bathroom. I get a call on my cellphone and its him. He describes his situation and tells me he needs a condom because he knows i usually keep them handy. I was already late for a date I had set up but I was willing to drop everything to help my friend out because I know he would do the same for me no questions asked. Thats just the type of people I roll with. So I go to his house which is only about 5 minutes away and I ring the doorbell. He answers the door and tells me he doesnt need the condom anymore. Im shocked and cant believe he would risk getting a women pregnant, getting an std blah blah blah. He assures me thats not what happened. Apparently he was so exited about the prospect of loosing his virginity that he came without doing anything." Notice where I threw in my DHV spikes? "i was already late for a date that i set up" "that just the type of people I roll with" "he knows I keep condoms handy" all those things are demonstrations of higher value embedded into my story so i am not "bragging" |
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| Author: | plato1 [ Wed Mar 23, 2011 7:06 pm ] |
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Just out of curiosity how did it take you tell that story? |
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| Author: | Ecudes17 [ Wed Mar 23, 2011 7:20 pm ] |
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Quote: Just out of curiosity how did it take you tell that story?
I dont understand your question.
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| Author: | Brah [ Wed Mar 23, 2011 8:25 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: little ruitine I invented |
Reading this story I immediately think 2 things: 1) Remove "Thats just the type of people I roll with." It's unnecessary and sounds like bragging. It's already implied from your story so doesn't need to be said. 2) The story has way too much strange info that doesn't need to be included at all, and comes off as you being 'weird". Drop ALL the stuff about him not getting hard and having ED problems. it's totally beside the point to the story which was he DOESNT HAVE A CONDOM. So the story becomes more like "my friend was with a girl, realized he didnt have a condom, went to his bathroom and called me, I went to deliver it, he came in the bathroom from being excited" |
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| Author: | Ecudes17 [ Wed Mar 23, 2011 8:39 pm ] |
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Thats an interesting perspective. My point of the story, and the reason I mentioned the ED was to build a plotline suggesting that he was so exited about the prospect of finnaly having sex that he came before he could have sex which is ironic and humorous. That being said, I think you may be right about it being exessive. Perhaps I could swap out the ED bit and replace it with "my friend, was a virgin at the time and he was so anxious to finnaly break out of the virgin trap that....." |
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