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| Author: | VietnameseProdigy [ Mon Jun 20, 2011 2:34 am ] |
| Post subject: | Critique my POF/OKCupid account |
Not too harshly! haha http://www.plentyoffish.com/viewprofile ... d=28794855 http://www.okcupid.com/profile/huahuahuahuahua I've gotten a few responses.... but my response rate is very low, I'm like 5/30. I've tried canned stuff, my own stuff. I kind of copied a mPUA's okcupid profile. Oh yeah and I'm 16 and a half  Any ways to increase my response rate? |
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| Author: | TheFreshPrince [ Wed Jun 22, 2011 2:59 am ] |
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Hey, man. Just a couple of quick thoughts: 1. You shouldn't have a picture of yourself with another girl in there. It's not making them jealous. It's an immediate turn off. 2. Your 'What I'm Doing in Life' is good - the first line. The second shows potential, but no actual movement. Should be more like "I'm on my way to being a sports agent" or "I'm working on becoming a sports agent". It shows more forward movement in your social status. 3. Your Self Summary I'm afraid comes across more as self-bragging than comedic. I know it was supposed to be cocky-funny, but it comes across more as just self-centered and egotistical. 4. Try to clean up some of the rambling "jokes" like the Zimbabwe midget and such. I personally don't find them funny, though it's obvious you do. No problem. I'm not criticizing you. But that sort of off-the-wall humor gives away that you're 16. I may not have known it if you hadn't told us, but I would have thought of you as one VERY immature 22 year old. |
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