Ok yeah now it finds it.
Three pics are all kind of similar, I would just choose one of them and get rid of the rest. Then try and get some other pics in different situtions to add up there in their place.
I'd lose both the spartacus and Tiger woods lines. Confidence and a strong sense of self are attractive, so even though it's a joke, best lose it.
Also be aware of how it looks asthetically, the next paragraph looks like a massive block of text compared to all the others. It'll put people off reading it. Also re-read and try to make it flow better. For instance;
"Obviously there has to be mutual physical attraction for there to be good chemistry between two people. So being attractive and fit are important, as well as affection", these two lines are a bit fragmented and the affection thing looks tacked on at the end in an attempt to not look shallow. If you want to keep it, it would read better as one sentance instead of two, "Obviously there has to be mutual physical attraction for there to be good chemistry between two people, so being fit and attractive is important to me."
That being said, I don't think you need that line, you're not gonna go out with anyone you don't find attractive but no need to broadcast that, maybe it looks like you have standards etc but it might put off some 6s and 7s.
Long walks is a bit of a cliche so I'd lose that.
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