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Author:  Strategist [ Sat Jan 08, 2011 9:02 am ]
Post subject:  Is this POF Profile Good? Any Help would be Great...
Sunject: Warning!!! Heartbreaker

Interest
Singing Song Writing Sports
Traveling Clubbin Exercise
Spending my daughter

About Me

I'm a very intelligent man with a sense of humor who's not bad on the eyes or the ears. My friends say I'm a smart-ass I say they're right. ;) I keep busy so if you can't keep up you might be left behind lol. I also get daddy's girl every other weekend so if you're a good girl I'll take you both out for strawberry ice cream. If you're bad you only get a Cherry Popsicle. I'm a Direct Support Associate which means I care for people who need assistance in everyday life and I love my job. When I'm not working I'm usually working on songs in the studio. Music is my passion and is very important to me. Right now I'm helping my mother get on her feet until she get's a job. I've only been living in Muncie for about 3 weeks or so. I'm looking for someone to hang with and have some fun. I want to go skydiving who's brave enough to do it with me.

First Date

Skydiving... Okay maybe that's more of a third or fourth date. So guess you'll just have to be surprised for the first one...

Please let me know what you think and improvements I can make
Author:  skypirate35 [ Sat Jan 08, 2011 2:48 pm ]
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"intelligent" - should be apparent from other things

"sense of humor" - everyone has one of some kind and should be apparent in other things.

"not bad on the eyes or the ears" - guys shouldn't be bothered about that. leave it out

change winking emoticon for grinning

don't lol at "might be left behind" and the rest of your profile mostly implies you're busy doing you OWN thing.

"I also get daddy's girl" bit sounds good.

there maybe better ways to talk about your job, link it to your mother.

"so. I'm looking" there shouldn't be a dot in there.

be more specific about "hang with and have some fun". this is one place you can indicate things you like doing that girls can identify with. at this point you want to avoid being associated with guys that say similar things but mean hook up.

"want to go skydiving" seems a bit random. out of place.

"heartbreaker" in your headline is contradictory to your clearly caring nature in your profile.

you want to downplay things you do by yourself and up-play things you do that other people can do with you. One of the best filters is travelling as there is a variety of ways people like to do, camping/roughing it, exploring cities, chilling on the beach.

start with "i'm a smart ass"
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