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| Author: | Ravencroft [ Thu Oct 08, 2009 8:21 am ] |
| Post subject: | Judge me. (my profile) |
This is my third on MySpace. Only used the last two for actual online sarging. http://www.myspace.com/eternalwinter89 I need some new pics, but back in my glory days I was using a pic worse than that. |
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| Author: | spinstill [ Thu Oct 08, 2009 10:11 am ] |
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I like all the pre-selection on there. Maybe add more about you and less about sword fighting |
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| Author: | Voodoo.Fresh [ Thu Oct 08, 2009 10:34 am ] |
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yeah.. I'd cut off the swords part, say you practice martial arts, swords sound like D&D, while martial arts = protection safty and strength. also, find a picture which your active in, pref. with people. I don't know myspace that well but should you put that DHV story there? sounds kinda clingy, like you start by talking about a certain girl and how much you did for her. |
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| Author: | Ravencroft [ Thu Oct 08, 2009 10:52 am ] |
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Point taken on the swords, guys. Thanks! As far as the DHV story goes, MySpace Method suggests putting one in that section of the profile, so thought I'd try it out. |
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| Author: | Saint1990 [ Thu Oct 08, 2009 11:59 am ] |
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Yea buddy i would have to side on the non sword talk side. The story doesnt seem to flow too well and if you just read it and dont look at your relationship status it looks like you have a girlifriend. However that ashley girl looks like a huni lol! |
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| Author: | PatrickLH [ Thu Oct 08, 2009 12:51 pm ] |
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A single DHV in your interests doesn't add enough depth to the profile. I honestly can't see a girl getting interested by a paragraph tale of surfing and jet skis. That's kinda what it comes off as; a tale, a woven story to inflate the excitement of your life. It's a good rough draft, but you would do well to put it in a myspace blog and rewrite it with much more detail and length. The swords bit... take it out entirely and switch it with MMA, mention a few specific styles like Muay Thai and/or sprawl and brawl (a hybrid style). Add some books, movies, and bands that you're interested in. If you play sports, throw that in the interests section instead of the story... And take Voodoo's advice on getting some new pictures. Preferably with some that make your eyes less... leery, I guess? Excellent job on the backround though; it's fun and not overdone. Simply some constructive criticism, send me a PM if you need that surf story redone. I'm borderline Miagi (lolkaratekid) with words like that. |
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