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Author:  Duddelmus [ Fri Nov 28, 2008 7:51 am ]
Post subject:  Please critique my first facebook/text-message game

Hi. I'm new to the PUA community, so not so many weeks ago I was the AFC that we have all been some time in the past ;) So I'll start off with some background information.

A couple of months ago I met this HB9 that was in a relationship at the time, but seemed intrested. I met her a couple of times and at our third meeting she told me she just broke up with her BF. As the AFC i was I was this super-nice guy who invited to dinners, long talks, was clingy and needy.
Even with my AFC-skills I managed to kiss-close on our 4th meeting, and f-close on our 6th meeting. (but hey, even a blind mouse can find the occational cheese) We continued meeting up the next month, and every evening ended up with sex. I thought I was the luckiest guy alive, so I did everything I could not to lose her. Payed for everything, acting needy, and the big deal-breaker: I told her how I felt about her.
Since then things have been going kind of up and down. She's been acting not intrested, and kind off annoyed by me.
I still had theese feelings for her, so I decided to find out what makes guys attractive to girls, and stumbled upon the PUA community. I've read The Game, numerous David DeAngelo-books, online books, and a lot of forums. And yesterday I tried out my first online-game with tthe same HB9.

So here goes. (everything written in bold is my comment to why I wrote what I wrote)
Oh, and I live in Europe, so text-messaging is more common than actual calls. (yeah, I know.. how stupid is that? :p ) And the conversation was going on in my own language, so this is the translated version.

Facebook chat:
Me: Hey HB9. Quick question. I'm on my way out.. **False time-constraint**

HB9: yep

Me: I'm trying to plan next week. Wanna meet up this monday? :) **Yeah, I know, a little AFC**

HB9: Bah, I can't this monday. Got this project at school that I need to deliver on tuesday, so I'm working with my group all night.. yuck!

Me: ok :) btw, it looks like you got a little less flexible calender than me. Why don't you find days that works for you, and you ask me if I can make it in stead? I'm tired of asking and getting no all the time ;P

HB9: haha, of course :)

Me: But gotta run. Text me.
**And then I went offline right after sending the last message, so I was the one finishing the conversation**

Half an hour later, I got a text from HB9 on my cell.

Her: How about tuesday or wednesday? :)

Me: Hmm.. I got some work-things happening one or both of those days.. I'll check my calender when I'm back home and I'll answer you tonight. :)

Her: Ok, but we'll figure something out. :)

Me: Yep. We'll do that. Long time since we hooked up now. But I'll text you later, we'll figure it out. **Again being the one ending the conversation, and no smilys to act busy**

Two hours later I texted her:
me: Hey friend! Just checked my calender.. And if I work a little on monday I can make it happen on tuesday. But on one condition! You have to give me a great big hug when I see you! :) **Calling her friend to create the why-don't-he-like-me-syndrome, and making her jump through my hoop before I commit to tuesday and jumping through hers**

Her: Yep, tuesday it is! Or we can take it some other day, if you have to stress at work to make it happen.. And of course you're getting a hug ;)

Me: Nah, no plans yet on Monday, so I'll do some work then. And we can't take it some other day, cause I've been hungering for this great steak dinner for weeks :p And the new episodes of Dexter! You havent been watching them behind my back, have you? ;P **We have been talking earlier about a steak dinner and Dexter-episodes the next time we hook up**

Her: No, I would never do that! You know I can't watch Dexter unless I'm with you! :)

Me: You obviously know what's best for you! Cause if you had seen the new episodes without me, you would be up for a beating! ;P But I'm hitting the shower and heading for bed. (it still smells like massage-oil from last time :o ) **intern joke** Got this party I have to be ready for tomorrow, so I need my beautysleep. Good night, and sleep tight, HB9. :) **Again being the one ending the conversation, and as a little DHV, telling her I got this party tomorrow**

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So there it is. As this was my first online/text-game so I bet it isnt as good as it should be :P
Where can I improve, and did I do something wrong?

oh, and I'm good in handling critique, so be harsh and point out every little mistake you can find. :)

Author:  uncompletesex [ Fri Nov 28, 2008 4:23 pm ]
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I'm not an expert at the game, but i can say it is definitely better than the material I use. Good job! :wink:

Author:  Duddelmus [ Mon Dec 01, 2008 7:21 am ]
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Thank you :)

Anyone else got some critique on my text-game? Every feedback helps :)

Have been running some text-game and phone-game on her since Thursday, and I've gotten a lot of IOI's from her for the first time in weeks. :)
So tomorrow's the big day, and I'll tell you guys how it went on wednesday. Time to run the IRL-game ;)

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