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Author:  Fishysmell [ Fri Nov 21, 2008 4:47 pm ]
Post subject:  Anyone have time to critique my profile?...
I know I'm new to this forum- just left an old "speed seduction" community and I plan on sticking around here for quite some time because of the wealth of information and it seems like some pretty cool members on this forum. I posted yesterday looking for some help and about a specific close and got help from someone right away even though it was my first post.

<BR>So after scoping some of the topics, I never really ever thought of Online Sarging. I decided I am going to give it a shot and try some of the openers listed and just mess around with it and see how it goes. I would say I am RAFC and trying to get it to the next stage and have been working on my game for about 8 months with pretty good results for the last 4 months playing the bar end. I worked at one of the most popular bars in my area up until a few months ago so that HELPED a lot getting done and being surrounded by HB's, being able to get them to stay after hours with me since I was an employee, and all the other shit. Literally like shooting fish in a barrel.
<BR>Just started a new job which travels a lot so I don't have much time to get out other then a friday or saturday every couple weeks. I figured I would see how the myspace sarging goes; If anyone has some time and get tell me what I should do to my profile to give me an edge I would be happy to hear it, constructive criticism- I can handle it. I already copied a blog post by Whoopie that was recommended via PM that I post it. Any help would be appreciated, thanks fellas...
<BR>>Profile "number" after is myspace(......c*om/fathenryisfat)

<BR> -Jay
Author:  jurupa [ Fri Nov 21, 2008 6:01 pm ]
Post subject: 
Got the following message:

Invalid Friend ID.
This user has either cancelled their membership, or their account has been deleted.
Author:  Fishysmell [ Fri Nov 21, 2008 9:22 pm ]
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I dont know why it is doing that... usually after .com/ it has an number or a personal url tag. Mine is a personal tag so it looks like this /fathenryisfat - For some reason I cant post url's yet? http://www.myspace.com/fathenryisfat

All fixed, now should work fine, thanks

-Jay
Author:  jurupa [ Fri Nov 21, 2008 9:56 pm ]
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It works now.

As far as your profile goes its information overload to the nth degree. Your about me is way to long. It should be no more than half that length at most. Also you may want to either remove or move the porn stars that are in your top friends list. I see that your trying to look like your popular and all but when it comes to porn and girls they seem to either hate it or like it.
Author:  NINO THE BEAST [ Fri Nov 21, 2008 11:08 pm ]
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Yea man the porn stars gotta go... The about me was pretty long, its like an opener almost, catchin the attention and DHVin. If I were you Id also throw in some CF (cocky funny).

One last thing, try and get a background, idk it just adds to the whole dealio.. But yea hope this helps.
Peace
Author:  Fishysmell [ Sat Nov 22, 2008 10:05 pm ]
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Thanks for the advice guys, going to edit it when I get home from work tonight.
Author:  Fishysmell [ Sun Nov 23, 2008 12:21 am ]
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Suggestions noted- Changed it-I think it looks much better now- any follow up comments or suggestions now? Getting ready to go hit the streets with my wing. later fellas

-Jay
Author:  jurupa [ Sun Nov 23, 2008 8:33 am ]
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Much much better. The only problem I see is your about me section. It comes off as generic. You may want to put some DHV in there and/or more personality into it.
Author:  NINO THE BEAST [ Sun Nov 23, 2008 8:18 pm ]
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yea man BIG DIFFRENCE! much better!
happy sargin
peace
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