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| Author: | LeDerek [ Sat Aug 09, 2008 6:26 am ] |
| Post subject: | Critique my online game (pretty long read) |
ME: Hey, my ex and I just broke up and she is stalking my profile... could ya send me a fun/sexy comment to make her a little jealous? Her: no problem.... what do you want me to say... give me an idea Me: lol, idk be creative Her: sorry if its a lil much. im not good at the funny thing. (the comment) hey babe!!!=] loveeee talking to you (keeping in mind this is the first time i've even spoken to this girl) Me: works just fine by me lol, now if we can just turn that fictional comment into something real...tell me about yourself Her: hahaha umm im 18 from LOCATION. going to COLLEGE in the fall..... umm what else do you wanna know? Me: tell me why yur cool enough to be chatting with an exclusive character like me Her: umm because i just help you get back at your ex Me: you definitely did lol, i'm sure she'll flip out why did you choose COLLEGE? what do you wanna do after graduation? Her: cause its better than county and i applied to late at OTHER COLLEGE.... and i have nooooo idea what im gonna do. Me: no direction yet?? it'll all come in time tell me a bit more about yourself Her: what do you wanna know? Me: whats the craziest thing you've ever done? Her: hmmm are we talking pg crazy or xxx crazy? Me: idk, you tell me Her: well normal would be... idk jumping off 80ft cliffs... xxx would be having sex in the back room at work on camera. (IOI?) Me: WOW, you are wild and sexy, a little too wild and sexy for me Her: nahhh. just like to have a good time. Me: certainly sounds like it so tell me the 3 best things about yourself Her: ummm my ideas. my eyes. my crazy side Me: yeah, i'm definitely liking the eyes Her: thankyou. did the ex see my comment yet?(continuing the convo i thnk this is an IOI) Me: im not sure yet, i'll let you know when she does tho oh, and btw you owe me some compliments now too Her: oh yea? who says? Me: only the coolest person you know (me) Her: ohh. see i think you do enough complimenting of yourself that i dont have to Me: o'rly? well if yor gonna leave me hanging like this then idk if this will workout between us :PP Her: ohh wel excuse me.... see if i do you a favor next time. (is this some type of shit test or soemthing) Me: i was just joking (note the :PP at the end of the message), your a pretty awesome girl...suxs i'm going to college in REGION...you seem like a girl i could see myself spending some time with Her: oh yea? where you going? (IOI continuing the convo right?) Me: MY COLLEGE right in the middle of the hood lol Her: had you ever been to CITY before you applied there? Me: I applied to all 3 COLLEGE campuses and only got accepted there, so it was between that, COLLEGE, or COLLEGE...i picked COLLEGE because it was the cheapest, and they are giving me some scholarship money Her: ohhhh makes sense eh CITY isnt that bad. just dont give anyone shit and you will live Me: yaa, i should be able to handle my own there i'm getting soo tired, and its not really that late perhaps we can continue this conversation some other time Her: suree message me whenever Me: that was my hint for you to give me ur number lol ur not so good at this game haha Her: sorrrry... you should have just said that.... PHONE NUMBER Me: well i'm about to hit the sheets, try not to dream about me all night now ;] Her: haha ok... night PLZ tell me my strong/weak points i will love you forever (no homo) if you read through the whole thing |
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| Author: | Musterion [ Sat Aug 09, 2008 2:57 pm ] |
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Sounds good man. Though to me in and around the early/middle stages you coulda asked less questions, looked almost like a bit of an interrogation and I think that could be why she shit-tested you. I think you brought in your SOI at just the right time though. Just to say I have basically no experience to go on with this, just going on instinct here so don't take the above as gold lol. |
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| Author: | Stetson [ Sat Aug 09, 2008 7:23 pm ] |
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Great opener. But now, let me break it down for you completely. Quote: why did you choose COLLEGE?
This was your first problem = interviewing her.what do you wanna do after graduation? Quote:
Me:
Wrong neg. Could have done alot more better. Heres it fixed:WOW, you are wild and sexy, a little too wild and sexy for me Razz Her: nahhh. just like to have a good time. Me: certainly sounds like it Wink Her: well normal would be... idk jumping off 80ft cliffs... xxx would be having sex in the back room at work on camera. PUA: Whoah your crazy! I like it... Too bad, I don't date girls who are blonde Quote: Her:
You just complimented her like an AFC, which after she changed the topic to some less serious and released the tension. No, it wasn't an IOI.ummm my ideas. my eyes. my crazy side Me: yeah, i'm definitely liking the eyes Her: thankyou. did the ex see my comment yet? An example of IOI in that case would have been something like "What color are your eyes?" Quote: Me:
Overcocky. More fun, less cocky. Have them balanced.im not sure yet, i'll let you know when she does tho oh, and btw you owe me some compliments now too Wink Her: oh yea? who says? Me: only the coolest person you know (me) Razz Quote: Her:
You are sounding too needy. Also there was no shit test, it was an IOD.ohh. see i think you do enough complimenting of yourself that i dont have to Smile Me: o'rly? well if yor gonna leave me hanging like this then idk if this will workout between us RazzP Her: ohh wel excuse me.... see if i do you a favor next time. Quote: Me:
Now you came back to her like a crying little puppy, rewarding her for her IOD.Sad i was just joking (note the RazzP at the end of the message), your a pretty awesome girl...suxs i'm going to college in REGION...you seem like a girl i could see myself spending some time with Smile (rewarding her with an IOI) Her: oh yea? where you going? (IOI continuing the convo right?) No IOI, what she did is called "being polite". Now I will skip all the comfort speech. Quote: Me:
Resistant to give her number out, I bet she will flake... But anyway, you are still practicing yaa, i should be able to handle my own there i'm getting soo tired, and its not really that late perhaps we can continue this conversation some other time Wink Her: suree message me whenever Your ending was nice enough though. |
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| Author: | revolver [ Sun Aug 10, 2008 12:02 pm ] |
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Why are you sending so many messages to her? All you actually need is two-three messages and then you should take it to the phone. Simple. |
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