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| Author: | IMAjohnATION [ Wed Jul 09, 2014 3:37 pm ] |
| Post subject: | New dating profile critique |
So after listening to some material about Online Dating, and profile development I've ripped down my old one and posted up a new one. I've posted it below. I'd love to here from experts. Likes, dislikes, area's for improvement. Would all be greatly appreciated. (I wanted something that was DHV friendly, but also gave women a sense of needing to prove their worth to me.) Here it is: "If you're looking for a passive, unintelligent, narrow minded, low self esteem guy whose just can't wait to dote on your every desire, and is excited to make it possible for you to never hear the word "no" again than I suggest you FIND ANOTHER PROFILE. Who am I? I'm the guy your mom warned you about. You know, the one who takes you to the beach to watch the sunset... and... throws sand in your hair. People describe me as a quick witted, and highly opinionated Adventure seeker with an affinity for healthy debate and a propensity for mischief. Yes, if you fall down I will always be there to pick you up... After I've laughed at you for being clumsy. Life isn't a joke, but have fun... it's not a dress rehearsal. I will not accept Settling down as the same thing as SETTLING, and just because you're female doesn't mean I automatically want you in my bed. Normal is mundane. Uptight is boring. Stark raving mad is unattractive. So if you think you can keep up? I double dog dare you to prove it, and remember creativity is encouraged, but Intelligence is a prerequisite. Don't come to class without it." -- fire away gents.-- |
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| Author: | highiq [ Sat Jul 12, 2014 4:05 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: New dating profile critique |
I actually like it. I did think the first part seemed a bit weird and might turn girls off, but the rest of it seemed like it could work. I'd definitely give it a try for a while. In fact, I would just eliminate that first part, and start with "Who am I?" That seems more pimp somehow. Shorter is better anyway since the hot girls get 100 messages a day. |
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| Author: | IMAjohnATION [ Sun Jul 13, 2014 8:10 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: New dating profile critique |
Dude. Great insight. Def going to explore it that way and see how it goes. Thanks! |
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| Author: | ice_blunt [ Mon Jul 28, 2014 4:58 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: New dating profile critique |
The ending part is great. Keep us updated! As for the beginning, if you can somehow condense it to a sentence that would probably work better. |
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