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Author:  southernpride [ Thu Nov 28, 2013 4:51 am ]
Post subject:  It's that time... Critique my profile!
Just a simple POF account.
My about me:

Born and raised in south Georgia. I was twenty before I ever even saw snow! I'm a laid back, sarcastic guy with a good heart who can still get along with pretty much anyone.
Playing guitar, writing in my novel, and following the Braves and Georgia football are how I typically spend my free time. I like most any kind of music but I'm honestly still stuck in the 90's where the good bands are.
I spent four years and two deployments in the Marine Corps traveling the world but am now a full-time student hoping to make it into the upper tier of the medical field. Don't take that out of context and pass out so I have to save you!
I'd love to meet someone who is intelligent with a good sense of humor and keeps good company. If this sounds like you, message me and we'll see where it goes!






I'm sure I'm missing something, should remove something or change wording but tips are welcome.
Here's a link to the page so if you notice something else I can improve on, let me know.

http://www.pof.com/viewprofile.aspx?profile_id=65448402
Author:  Redspy [ Fri Nov 29, 2013 9:55 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: It's that time... Critique my profile!
I like the way you have a picture with women but I think it would be more appealing if it was with a friend who is a girl. No arm around them, just there with you. This way women will know that you can be tolerated and are accepted by other women.

"ages 18-99"
Be more specific. I try to do a 5 year span above and below. I think women may find that creepy or desperate.

Your profile description is hard to read. It's feels overwhelming. Space out the paragraphs. I will do it for you so all you need to do is copy/paste.


Born and raised in south Georgia. I was twenty before I ever even saw snow! I'm a laid back, sarcastic guy with a good heart who can still get along with pretty much anyone.

I really enjoy playing guitar, writing in my novel, and following the Braves and Georgia football in my free time. I like most any kind of music but I'm honestly still stuck in the 90's where the good bands are.

I spent four years and two deployments in the Marine Corps traveling the world but am now a full-time student hoping to make it into the upper tier of the medical field. Don't take that out of context and pass out so I have to save you!

I'd love to meet someone who is intelligent with a good sense of humor and keeps good company. If this sounds like you, message me and we'll see where it goes!


Feel free to take my suggestions. This is only my opinion. Good luck to you!
Author:  southernpride [ Fri Nov 29, 2013 11:07 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: It's that time... Critique my profile!
Well since they weren't actually paragraphs, I just kept them close but I do see your point.

As far as pics, I don't have any that are that are within the last 6 months except one... I've been friends with her for a long time but it could sorta come off as possibly intimate to someone who doesn't know better?
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This is the best sober one I have where there aren't arms around anyone. It's almost 3 years old but I don't think I look that different:

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I guess I could just note that this is actually my cousin but still the arm thing:

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