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| Author: | DEMORIS [ Sat Sep 28, 2013 2:09 am ] |
| Post subject: | Please critique my profile! |
New to online dating, and definitely not getting hits. I'd love feedback from the experts. Link: http://www.okcupid.com/profile/limitles ... cf=profile Thanks! |
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| Author: | Don Horneone [ Fri Oct 04, 2013 9:11 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Please critique my profile! |
Your profile is a qualification-fest, mind you the site seems to be set up that way. Every question except the last two is encouraging you to qualify yourself. I'm guessing a girl reading that might be a little scared that she might not dig you quite as much as you do and you might have a hard time dealing with that. You come across as a little intense about how great your life is. I think if you could turn that intensity from a 10 down to a 6 it would be pretty cool, mention a lot of the same things but just seem a bit more blasé about it. On the plus side you seem to have a really positive attitude and that's bound to work for you. For specific examples: I would remove the word "ridiculously" and replace it with "very" I would lose "I've got stories upon stories", sounds a bit show-offy Also lose "it's not cocky if it's true" Does the "I'm looking for" just give you a list of bland ballet points to choose from? As I said I think the site is a bit difficult because it encourages you to qualify yourself heavily but doesn't give much of a chance for you to qualify her |
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| Author: | Zirk13 [ Fri Oct 04, 2013 9:16 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Please critique my profile! |
u have a pic with yall around the fire pit and a guys got a minters hat. you need to make that pic one of your three that show when you hover on pics. The fire and the minters hat will perk interests of snooping for the girls |
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| Author: | ZealousR [ Sat Oct 05, 2013 1:11 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Please critique my profile! |
You're boring. You won't get many responses or as much rolling conversations if she already knows everything about you, that is if she can survive far enough down everything. Try this. Be more mysterious: leave them wondering 'hmm, what else is unique about him'. Shorten it down to things that make you stand out. unique AND mysterious. Correlate to yourself: If you're a man of intelligence make it stand out, and stick by it through the interaction. For example My profile starts with the line "I'm the bad boy all your friends warned you about (;" You know yourself, so project yourself as who you are. Out go your intentions: throw out the girl you're looking for, again correlate to the kind of girl that gains your interest. If you're looking for a sexual girl say 'a girl who knows what a good time is' if you're a romantic then 'a girl to call mine'. If you make a long list you're disqualifying many more girls. You seem like you're a cool person with an exciting lifestyle just a few notches in your profile. Remember: appeal to her emotions and make her excited not bored! |
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| Author: | DEMORIS [ Wed Oct 09, 2013 6:47 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Please critique my profile! |
Hey this is all awesome advice! I have to admit, I always struggle with the "mystery" element. It's so much to say "be mysterious" but does anyone have more specific examples? Or a link to their killer profile? Thanks for the help, DEMO |
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