First off, great choice on the pictures! As for the rest, it's not bad, but I think you put waaay too much info in your "About Me" section. You need to leave some mystery so the girl is curious about you. Right now any girl who reads your profile will already know too much about you, without even talking to you yet. Also, the bolded words looks like you take it too seriously, IMO.
If I were you, I'd trim it down to this: (Note that I added a few smileys, girls love that shit)
Quote:
Seamless transition between work and play is my strong suit. My ambition keeps me focused on the important things in life, whilst my inner party-animal makes sure that I always keep things exciting and adventurous.
I always look my best, and value a healthy touch of vanity in a woman; but if your dress size exceeds your IQ we probably won't get along.
If you are a playful and exciting young lady who thinks she can captivate me with conversation and a cute smile, you should send me a message. But be warned... it takes a special kind of girl to keep up with me!
3 paragraphs is MORE than enough. As for the information itself, it's decent, but maybe needs some more DHVs. Remember, you want to STAND OUT from the other guys! I'm not going to tell you what to write, but if you want some inspiration, you can take a look at my profile (trust me, girls message me on the daily I always look my best, and value a healthy touch of vanity in a woman; but if your dress size exceeds your IQ we probably won't get along.
If you are a playful and exciting young lady who thinks she can captivate me with conversation and a cute smile, you should send me a message. But be warned... it takes a special kind of girl to keep up with me!
). Anyways, we live so far away from each other that it doesn't even matter if you look at it!