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Author:  knock_out [ Mon Jun 10, 2013 5:12 pm ]
Post subject:  Profile Critique: First Post -POF
Hello Folks,

First post here...seem like a great group of gents. Hopefully I can learn some.

Title: patsfan1988: Cook the Bacon Last!

About Me

I'm a middle child, I have an older brother that gave me swirlies, and a younger sister that I never let win in Mario Kart. So you can imagine, we are all really close.

I like to try new restaurants, if the food is so spicy that i'm tearing and/or sweating..then that is some pretty damn good food.

I once jumped out the window of a moving limo in NYC...and lived.

I've been doing Cross-fit since January, and have been doing the Paleo diet...I ****ing hate burpees, but I LOVE Bacon.

Outside of work, I have a sailor mouth, so if you have virgin ears, then I recommend calling the wambulance.

I have a bucket list and can't quite wrap my head around people that don't have one. If you are one of them, you make me sick. lol...


***If you don't have goals, please don't message me..i'm not interested in women who are okay with stagnation***

--The Bucket List---

SkyDiving
Seeing the Aurora Borealis
Backpack through Europe
Scubadiving in the Great Barrier Reef
Go to Ultra

First Date: Backrubs and Ice Cream
Author:  TheFury [ Mon Jun 10, 2013 6:01 pm ]
Post subject:  Re: Profile Critique: First Post -POF
the length of the profile is good and some of it is funny, but I would take out stuff like "I don't want a woman who blah blah" I don't like to talk about the kind of women that I want, there's no reason to exclude people or appear 'rude', you can just ignore anyone who contacts you that doesn't fit the bill. I also would not talk about the diet stuff too much; diet has become almost like a religion or politics, and it isn't worth alienating potential hb's over the recent fad diet you have gotten into.

In short, it's decent, but take out the negativity (if you don't have a bucket list, etc.) The wambulance is ok, i kinda like that.
Author:  Hunter_Foxe [ Mon Jun 10, 2013 7:34 pm ]
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Get rid of the ***if you don't have goals*** part. You don't want to rule out students and party girls.

Also I think you are trying too hard to make your life sound more exciting than it is. What do you do for a living? Food is not exciting btw, unless you own a restaurant.

This springs to mind...

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Author:  Profile Diva [ Sun Jun 16, 2013 12:38 pm ]
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Quote:
the length of the profile is good and some of it is funny, but I would take out stuff like "I don't want a woman who blah blah" I don't like to talk about the kind of women that I want, there's no reason to exclude people or appear 'rude', you can just ignore anyone who contacts you that doesn't fit the bill. I also would not talk about the diet stuff too much; diet has become almost like a religion or politics, and it isn't worth alienating potential hb's over the recent fad diet you have gotten into.

In short, it's decent, but take out the negativity (if you don't have a bucket list, etc.) The wambulance is ok, i kinda like that.

From a woman's POV I agree with above and always advise men to keep it positive. Better to say what you do like/want than what you don't. Also, it's a bit too adolescent. After the first three lines she now has a picture of your head in a toilet, and you crying/sweating profusely when you're out to dinner. Kinda gross.

I like to bucket list, and the part about the bacon. Everyone LOVES bacon!

Check out my free tips on what makes a good profile at http://www.profilediva.net/html
Author:  knock_out [ Sun Jun 16, 2013 12:47 pm ]
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thanks for all the tips dudes, great input!
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