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| Author: | dp9103 [ Mon Dec 24, 2007 7:25 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Please help me with my myspace page |
hey guy, i need help with my myspace page i have been trying 100's of openers and i have been get only a 5% sucess rate and it thinks its because of my page please tell me what i should change be as brutal as you can, lol thank you very much www.myspace.com/dpx102[/url] |
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| Author: | dp9103 [ Wed Dec 26, 2007 2:57 am ] |
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no one has any advise for me ;( |
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| Author: | arsenal99 [ Wed Dec 26, 2007 9:14 am ] |
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i tried clicking on the the link but it says page cannot be displayed
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| Author: | dp9103 [ Wed Dec 26, 2007 2:35 pm ] |
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http://www.myspace.com/dpx102 |
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| Author: | Xfiend [ Wed Dec 26, 2007 3:40 pm ] |
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here's what I noticed... Your front page doesn't convey much about your personality. The background picture is unoriginal and boring, the things you have to say about yourself are humorless. Myspace pages need to be eye catching and funny. If people aren't entertained, they won't keep looking. I looked at some of your pictures, and I really liked what you are trying to do. 1) show you do fun things 2) show that you have lots of fun friends 3) show that your preselected by females. This is exactly what myspace pictures should do. However, I'd like to be a little more specific here. Many of your pictures look like you snuck into the frame of someone elses picture, then try'd to play it off as yours... here's some examples: http://viewmorepics.myspace.com/index.c ... ID=4978478 girl looks annoyed your there giant DLV looks annoyed your there Looks like you just snuck into the picture - dlv snuck into the frame pictures of groping chics are creepy creepy guy with guns... not good you look like your having a lot more fun then she is... there are a couple of more of these as well that suit you wear is way to "stiff". You look like a used car salesman. I'd ditch all those pictures of you in it. From now on, when your sarging in it, untuck the shirt, loosen the tie, unbutton the top 2 buttons... you'll look way more relaxed. hope this was helpful. let me know if you have any more questions. |
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| Author: | dp9103 [ Wed Dec 26, 2007 7:26 pm ] |
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hey xfiend thanks for the advise i made a new page tell me what you think old page - http://www.myspace.com/dpx102 new page - http://www.myspace.com/dp9103 |
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| Author: | Xfiend [ Wed Dec 26, 2007 8:35 pm ] |
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its private... |
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| Author: | dp9103 [ Wed Dec 26, 2007 8:49 pm ] |
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sorry its not private anymore |
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| Author: | Xfiend [ Wed Dec 26, 2007 8:57 pm ] |
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the new layout is sharp. I still don't think its very funny though, I'd like to see more of that. don't tell me your cocky... BE COCKY don't tell me your fun... BE FUN don't tell me your sarcastic... BE SARCASTIC you get the picture. also i don't understand the line about "i changed my mind about everything, i want to be friends first". It doesn't make sense. Your pictures are much much much better. They make you look way more fun. I think though, that you may have to many girl+boy+girl pics. seems like there's 4 or 5 of them on there... I'd go with one or two, max. Otherwise you come across as try hard. Lots of improvements though! |
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| Author: | dp9103 [ Wed Dec 26, 2007 8:59 pm ] |
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i got the about me and from a few pua's myspace pages do you have any suggestion on what i should change my about me too |
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| Author: | Xfiend [ Wed Dec 26, 2007 9:02 pm ] |
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the new layout is sharp. I still don't think its very funny though, I'd like to see more of that. don't tell me your cocky... BE COCKY don't tell me your fun... BE FUN don't tell me your sarcastic... BE SARCASTIC you get the picture. also i don't understand the line about "i changed my mind about everything, i want to be friends first". It doesn't make sense. Your pictures are much much better. They make you look way more fun. I think though, that you may have to many girl+boy+girl pics. seems like there's 4 or 5 of them on there... I'd go with one or two, max. Otherwise you come across as try hard. Lots of improvements though! ooh, just for reference, here's mine: http://www.myspace.com/cincitydevil Keep in mind that I have a girlfriend, and i'm not trying to sarge anyone with my myspace page... but I do get a lot of messages along the lines of "you seem like a lot of fun" "its too bad you have a girlfriend" "i love johnny cash" "I really like your page" etc etc etc. |
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