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Author:  Brawndo [ Sat Nov 12, 2011 1:40 am ]
Post subject:  POF profile critique
I'll join the movement here and ask for advice on my POF profile. It's a bit longer but I basically used a template from DD and altered it for me.


http://www.pof.com/viewprofile.aspx?profile_id=1353253
Author:  JSmooth [ Sat Nov 12, 2011 3:57 am ]
Post subject:  Re: POF profile critique
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I'll join the movement here and ask for advice on my POF profile. It's a bit longer but I basically used a template from DD and altered it for me.


http://www.pof.com/viewprofile.aspx?profile_id=1353253
Great profile. Don't take this the wrong way but you and I could totally get along. LOL. :lol: Love the, "Same thing we do every night pinky....try to take over the world!"I also love that you do like a lot of women do say up front no one night stands or people who play games. That does a lot of good disqualification for you right away!

That being said there is only a couple of minor tweeks that I'd recommend. You talk about going skydiving, camping, hiking, and other stuff. But all the photos I see of you are around your home mostly. They are good pictures but if possible I'd pull pics of you actually out doing things you like to do. That'll show more congruence with your profile that you actually like to do those things and aren't just saying that.

The other thing is your headline is "A real man" which I like, but if that's not working for you then I'd go with something a bit more cocky.

Finally, you never call the reader to action to message you. It's a small thing to go in your profile but it helps out!

You got a great profile as is. With some tweeks mainly to your photos you'll be knocking them dead in no time at all.
Author:  Brawndo [ Sat Nov 12, 2011 9:08 pm ]
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Thanks for the review. Definitely agree with the pics, need to give myself more pics being outside doing things (DHV). One thing I always do when I message is say "check out my profile and send me a message if you agree" because it's actually making them read my profile, seeing that we get along well and make that connection.

I'll tweak it, add some photos and make it a tad shorter. Thanks again!
Author:  creddings [ Sun Nov 20, 2011 1:05 am ]
Post subject:  Critique
Well, I must say that I read your profile and discovered you must have used the same generic wording I did for wording the profile LOL. I tailored mine based on an example I read online, and you must have done the same thing, as what you wrote is EXACTLY the same "naked gun" etc as what I saw and partly used :P
Author:  stiffz [ Sun Nov 20, 2011 6:31 am ]
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well, for starters I'd recommend you copy paste everything you wrote and move to Okcupid, there are a lot more girls on POF, but dude they're fucking trash.

Girls on Okcupid are slightly more classy :)
Author:  dlightmen [ Sun Nov 20, 2011 4:07 pm ]
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LOVE the title!
Author:  Brawndo [ Sun Nov 20, 2011 6:11 pm ]
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I changed the title last week lol

I'm on Okcupid as well. The IM feature is a bit easier to use than POF's but nothin solid there either. Okcupid is a bit more classier than POF as POF seems to be more for dates than actual relationships.
Author:  JSmooth [ Mon Nov 21, 2011 12:33 am ]
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I changed the title last week lol

I'm on Okcupid as well. The IM feature is a bit easier to use than POF's but nothin solid there either. Okcupid is a bit more classier than POF as POF seems to be more for dates than actual relationships.
OKC is a good site. Not sure how I feel about your new headline. You still need to call the reader to action at the end. And you still have those pictures to work on.
Author:  Brawndo [ Mon Nov 21, 2011 5:55 am ]
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Pics I'm working on.

For call to action, how do I phrase it? "If you've read this far, I've definitely sparked your interest. So what are you waiting for? Send me a message already! :) "


Is that good?
Author:  JSmooth [ Mon Nov 21, 2011 12:45 pm ]
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Pics I'm working on.

For call to action, how do I phrase it? "If you've read this far, I've definitely sparked your interest. So what are you waiting for? Send me a message already! :) "


Is that good?
That looks good to me. :) You'll get more responses to your profile with it than without it. At least that's what online research indicates. I tend to play things by the numbers!
Author:  pleasureseeker [ Mon Nov 21, 2011 1:16 pm ]
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I would delete the "me with friends dogs" picture... Makes you look like your lonely.
Author:  Brawndo [ Mon Nov 21, 2011 2:36 pm ]
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For the dog pics - I kept that up there to show I can tame the wildest beast ;)
That and to show that I like animals, which a lot of women are into. I'll just delete the caption.
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