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Author:  SCORPION J009 [ Fri Oct 14, 2011 4:29 pm ]
Post subject:  My online dating profile - Suggestions

Ok so recently I have updated my online profile on okcupid.com

this is it : www.okcupid.com/profile/JordanBrookes

Any suggestions would be welcome :)

Thank you for your time

Author:  SCORPION J009 [ Fri Oct 14, 2011 11:05 pm ]
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No FeedBack come on guys! :P

Author:  Sidnne [ Sat Oct 15, 2011 12:26 am ]
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Your link doesn't go to your profile. You need the url that includes your username.

Author:  SCORPION J009 [ Sat Oct 15, 2011 11:56 am ]
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It is now fixed :)

Author:  Sidnne [ Sat Oct 15, 2011 5:27 pm ]
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Your main profile pic is bad. You're not smiling, you look angry, you look boring. Get some pics, that you didn't take yourself, of you out doing fun things and with other people.

Lose this line: "So as you read my description, i really hope its not like the 100s of other ones youve read in the past hour" Don't hope that your profile is different, just be confident that it is.

Get rid of this line also "(am i off to a good start? lol)." Lines like that are approval-seeking. They show a lack of confidence, like you don't believe what you're saying and need the girls to tell you that it's good or not.

Don't just say you're a student. Talk about what you are studying, why you are studying it (what you love about it), and what you hope to do with it in the future.

Don't say "the fact that no matter how bad I feel I will always try to make others happy." That is extremely low value and makes you sound like a puppy dog. That says that you don't value yourself or stand up for yourself, and no matter how bad you get walked on by people, you will still try to please them.

"Books: Too many to name." Just name a few. Name an author you like, or a literary genre you enjoy.

"Seeing other people smile, If you are not smiling you can be damn sure that I will get you too one way or another. " Again, low value. Plus, that is only 1 thing, not 6 things.

"I am really shy until I get to know someone. " Girls don't want a shy guy. They want a strong, confident guy who can lead them.

"You are looking for someone to make you happy and just have fun with but most of all someone who is loyal and will not let you down. " Low value again.


You need to change a lot of things. Women are going to read this and think you are a desperate puppy dog seeking a new owner and is begging "please love me." They don't want that. They want to read your profile and think "this is a man who will make me laugh and show me a good time."

Your profile is pretty boring and doesn't stand out at all. You need to be silly and make jokes. Show that you are fun and don't take yourself too seriously.

OKCupid is a bit different than the other dating sites in the way it is set up. This is the best source I've found for setting up an OKCupid-style profile:
http://www.scribd.com/doc/45842277/The-Profile-Formula

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